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I'm not seeing the main idea in your untitled book. Being evil is good. T:mad:hat isn't fitting in with me.
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LOL - I've discovered an new sub genre - Grammar Nazi exploitation :-)
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The heading on the daily news paper, read. "15,000,000 are unemployed in the U.S." Timmy fished in his pants pocket and pulled out three quarter, tossing them in his palm like dice, inserting the quarters into the news paper machine, he yanks on the news paper machine handle and pulls out a news paper.:D
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Newspaper is one word. There doesn't need to be a comma. Quarters should be plural. Period after dice. This doesn't need to be one sentence. Newspaper is still one word. A word you use four times in a paragraph. "Newspaper machine handle" is clunky. And lastly what the hell else is he gonna pull out? A squirrel? Poverty is scary, it's wonderful grounds for horror (Texas Chainsaw Massacre, The People Under The Stairs) but something must be coming out of the poverty. Read Jung, read Campbell and to learn to write read The Art of Fiction or On Writing. I don't want to be mean, but I can do better. I'll have three books in print come October. One of which was compared favorably to the works of Jonathan Swift in a review. You have expressed that any work of King's has less merit than the very mediocre The Regulators because statistically it sold less (Wikipedia is a wonderful substitute for literacy, isn't it?) and have displayed an ignorance in regards to using the English language as tool or weapon. Learn some humility, read more and hone the craft.
"Starving for a red hot hotdog, Timmy took his final Taco Bell paycheck to Dr.Hotdog's hotdog shack. He looked at the hotdog girl, with burning hotdog desire in his eyes and pain in his hotdogless stomach, and said "Gimme a hotdog." They were out of hotdogs." Don't do THAT!
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No, but I occasionally have the misfortune of finding newspapers in my Vend-a-Squirrel machine.
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They're coming to get you, Barbara! Stop it! You're ignorant! They're coming for you, Barbara! Stop it! You're acting like a child! They're coming for you! Look, there comes one of them now! He'll hear you! Here he comes now! I'm getting out of here! ![]() |
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I thought that looked wrong.
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