HDC as Superheroes!

[bwind22]

Haha, nice! Don't try to frisk Brix or he'll indent your face mofos!

And you get formatting kudos from me too. Nice job!

[ferretchucker]

Originally Posted by Papillon Noir

Awesome! Kudos for proper format. :D

Ouch...

:(

[Papillon Noir]

Originally Posted by ferretchucker

Ouch...

:(

Aw! Don't feel bad, Ferret. :( I love reading your stories. I don't expect you to write in proper format. I went to college for this so it's nice to see screenwriting again, but that doesn't mean yours are any less entertaining. :)

[ferretchucker]

I understand. :(

Anyway, I've slightly redesigned Eidolon.

Which one do you think is better (other design on previous page)

[massacre man]

Originally Posted by Papillon Noir

Aw! Don't feel bad, Ferret. :( I love reading your stories. I don't expect you to write in proper format. I went to college for this so it's nice to see screenwriting again, but that doesn't mean yours are any less entertaining. :)

I learned from downloading the Burn After Reading script. So if I mix or mess anything up, my apologies.

[massacre man]

I'm going to give this a bump and brainstorm another little preview to post up tonight after I get back from Monsters vs. Aliens. So if anyone has any revisions, images, or new characters go ahead and post them.

[Doc Faustus]

I also thought you could use some more civilians:
Name: Rosie the Riveter and the Dregs (hero and villain, retired)
Age:80/83
Real names: Rosie O' Shea and Walter Jones

During World War 2, many of America's heroes were off fighting the good fight against Hitler. Walt Jones, rejected for military service due to his asthma decided he had found a great opportunity. In an America free of superheroes, a costumed villain could really flourish. So, he got on a black suit and a pair of springed boots and became a bank robber. But, the Dregs was in the wrong place at the wrong time. Just as women were picking up the slack in the workplace, superpowered Rosie O' Shea was picking up the slack on the streets as powerhouse Rosie the Riveter. Not knowing that the Dreg's jumping abilities were not the product of superhuman talents, Rosie gave him all she had, which was enough to send the Dregs flying through a wall, break several of his bones and knock him out. A guilty Rosie felt bad that she had done all of this to a regular joe, so came to visit him frequently in the hospital. Walter fell in love with her right away, but it took some time for the hood to grow on Rosie. Walter swore he'd never return to crime if she would go to dinner with him just once. She agreed and that first date began a lifelong relationship. When the War ended, Rosie decided to give up superheroing and together, they opened Rosie's Place, a place for superheroes to gather, reminisce, share info and be themselves. Rosie works the door while Walter tends bar.

[Doc Faustus]

One last bit of character info on Volpone: His lair is known as the Den and is outfitted with a combination of Renaissance art and high technology. All Volpone units and his own costume are outfitted with a voice modulator. The voice? Errol Flynn.

[massacre man]

Time for another preview, featuring Red Dynamo

FADE IN:

EXT. TWILIGHT CITY SKYLINE - NIGHT

Establishing shot of Twilight City, a large city filled with hundreds of buildings and several skyscrapers, a city containing thousands of people with thousands of stories. A light, misty rain covers the sleeping city with a moist sheet. As we cut to-

INT. TWILIGHT CITY POLICE DEPT. - NIGHT

-our particular story for tonight. Two police officers enter dragging an unconscious man wearing shiny and polished metal boots and gauntlets that reflect his surroundings. He has a red suit with silver lightning bolts streaked down the side. One of the officers is holding his silver mask. A small drop of blood from where he was hit with a billy-club drips onto the floor. A female officer sitting behind a desk stands up.

FEMALE OFFICER
Which one is this?

MALE OFFICER #1
The burning homicide on Scott Lane.

CUT TO:

INT. TWILIGHT CITY POLICE DEPT, HOLDING CELL - NIGHT

The two male officers throw the unconscious murderer into the holding cell, which already contains a sleeping homeless man. Ink covers the unconscious man's fingers. After a few moments in the cell his eyes open, his irises are a dark brown around the iris, but surrounding the outer-edges is a piercing electric blue. The whites are red and cracked like lightning bolts striking the iris. When his eyes open the lights flicker and his hair begins to stand up. This is RED DYNAMO. He turns around to piece together where he is. He watches the two officers outside of the cell. The first officer is holding a manila filing folder.

MALE OFFICER #1
We got the results back on the prints.

MALE OFFICER #2
Yeah, and?

MALE OFFICER #1
It's James Macky.

The second officer stares blankly for a moment before a look of recognition hits his face.

MALE OFFICER #2
You mean THE James Macky? Danny Macky's kid?

MALE OFFICER #1
Yep. That's little Jamey Macky.

The first officer looks to the cell and sees Macky is awake.

MALE OFFICER #1
You know, ever since that night I scooped up your dad I wondered when I would finally see you come back here. Did you know that?

James stares at him, the red lightning bolts in his eyes haven't left.

MALE OFFICER #1
I almost lost my job because you ran away. How about that? Did you know that?

RED DYNAMO
Well you don't deserve to protect people. I outsmarted you and i was 10.

The male officer, obviously angered, rolls his sleeves up. The female officer rushes in. A worried expression plagues her otherwise pretty face.

FEMALE OFFICER
We just got an I.D. on Macky's victim...

MALE OFFICER #2
Yeah? Who is the Char-Head?

FEMALE OFFICER
It was Fitzgerald.

An expression of shock falls on the second officer's face. The first officer's glare on Macky grows more intense.

MALE OFFICER #1
What is it? Do you hate cops?

RED DYNAMO
Yeah...

MALE OFFICER #1
Alright, how did you do it?

RED DYNAMO
That's for me to know and for you to find out... Very soon.

Fed up, The first officer pulls out his keys and sticks one into a lock. As he pushes the door open James leaps forward and grabs the bars. Sending a current through them he shocks the officer and stops his heart. He drops to the ground, dead. Both officer's shuffle for their guns. The female officer gets on her walkie to shout for help. James ignores her and goes straight for the second officer and grabs both sides of his head. The officer's face slowly becomes more and more burned. James releases his grasp and the officer drops to the ground, also dead. He waits patiently for the female officer to finish calling backup. Officers begin to enter the room and stand in front of the exit pointing their guns at him. He puts his hands up as if he's surrendering. His hair begins to stand up straighter. A large bolt of Staccato lightning crashes through the roof and burns every officer to death. James smiles.

CUT TO:

INT. TWILIGHT CITY POLICE DEPT., EVIDENCE ROOM - NIGHT

James enters the dark evidence room, his eyes, still cracked, shift upward and the lights cut on. He walks to a shelf and grabs the silver mask that hides his nose and mouth. He dons the mask and exits the evidence room.

CUT TO:

EXT. TWILIGHT CITY SKYLINE - NIGHT

The rain has gotten heavy, pummeling all of Twilight City's beautifully-lit buildings. When suddenly a roar of thunder and large bolt of lightning CRASHES over the city and all of the lights go out.

FADE OUT

[ferretchucker]

Very nice, MM, very nice indeed. Now, let's see where Eidolon fits in. :)