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Good stuff Skoof.. Very descriptive I had a clear image of the scenario. And just as constructive criticism try and not use so many fifty cent words it sounds pretentious.
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01-07-2006, 07:46 PM
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01-07-2006, 08:42 PM
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fifty-cent words... expression meaning expensive or overly elaborate words. Its what people do when they want to sound smart.
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Cant say it applies here.
Although the thesaurus was used twice, I dont think thats too much. But thanks for the input . appreciated. EDIT: no no, it was used more. but not as much as one would think. What can i say, i like using "big words".;) Last edited by SKOOFx; 01-09-2006 at 05:39 AM.
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Disease
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Still waiting for part two skoof. Dont want to rush the creative juices but hoping you would do a follow up.
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02-16-2006, 07:03 AM
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I did like this story. (The scary women stuff is a bit creepy, but I don't mind it so much, as it is only a story). You are very creative and a very intelligent writer. I do not mind the use of "big" words. It makes me want to look up the words and expand my own vocabulary. Looking very forward to your next installment.
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02-16-2006, 07:44 AM
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wow, you guys are AWESOME.
I never bothered on a new installment, cause i figured nobody gives a shit. If this is the case, maybe i really will bust out a new short story each month. So you guys think i should continue with this character? maybe dig into his past via flashbacks? and develop his character/"adventures" more?
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