what do you think.................

[allmykids]

I'm not much of a writer but Here goes................

I want to laugh
I want to cry

I want to know the Reason why

I want to live
I want to die

I can't win I don't know Why

I want to Quit
I want to fight

I just can't figure out what's right

When I wake It starts again
Someone save me from my sin



So what do you guys think???

[filmmaker2]

I think it's very expressive and concise. I like it!~

[slasherman]

im writing a rock text these days......here are some of it...


My friend got a bigger dick
he fucked my girl
and it made me sick..

[allmykids]

Originally posted by filmmaker2
I think it's very expressive and concise. I like it!~

Thank you!! It Just came to me when I was depressed. :)

[MoonLit Meadow]

Originally posted by allmykids
Thank you!! It Just came to me when I was depressed. :)

I'm gonna echo what filmmaker said...definately to the point! :) It's not always necessary to find the hidden meaning in poetry...sometimes it's better to just lay it all out there..which is what you did :)
Good effort AMK. It's always good to vent. Sometimes writing down your feelings can help you deal with them better than just letting them stay bottled up inside. :)

[Deposable]

:eek:

[RavageRitual]

I liked it too, I could never right something like that. Good Job

[allmykids]

Originally posted by RavageRitual
I liked it too, I could never right something like that. Good Job

I can't write either but that just came to me. Weird huh!! Oh and thanks!! :D

[DraculaInDallas]

Good stuff AMK :)

[TheLivingDead]

You wont an honest opinion stick with your day job. It wasnt all that good.

[AWSTRICER]

Wow that was actually pretty good.