Michael Vs. Pinhead

[death_to_all]

Yeah well it can't not look any different because he has been hurt a lot and won't die. I think that he will be even more ugly than he was in the first Halloween.

[bone collector]

yeah

[AmarylandPsycho]

Heres a thought Jason And Michael are one and the same. Two split personalites conjured up to ease the suffering of a psychotic child locked away down the dank corridors of some pedophiles basement.

[death_to_all]

Yeah that is something, they are very alike Michael and Jason that maybe just maybe they are one and the same. Which was out first Halloween or Friday the 13th one could have been adapted from the other.

[massacre man]

Halloween (1978)
Friday The 13th (1980)

[Father Fitz]

It's a good thing this script isn't being offered for sale...A good script writing program (like "Final Draft") might come in handy to clean this thing up and give it some credibility and usability.
Good luck with it. :)

[MVP732]

im redoing the script using StoryView or something like that.

[Father Fitz]

MVP732...

If you haven't taken the time to compare the likes of "Final Draft" and "Story View", I strongly urge you to do so before you spend your money. Neither of these software programs are cheap but they're also not outrageously expensive, especially if you plan on using either one to churn out more than a couple of scripts.

I don't know how old you are, what level of education you've attained or even how long you've been writing (scripts, et al), but I'd venture to say that (from reading your script) you've got a long way to go before you get good at this thing. That's not to say that you don't have a talent (it's obvious that you do) but rather that there are weaknesses in your script involving presentation (structure), grammar, spelling, plot/premise, and even dialogue. Overall, production value isn't necessarily an issue since you're not selling the script. Fortunately, you've got the balls to display your unfinished work on the web for the whole world to see, and there's not a lot of people reading this (or your script) who can claim the same. Please read on, I'm on your side...

As far as my mentioning "Final Draft", I currently (for a 'ghost story-with-a-devilish-twist' script I'm working on) use the "6.0" version but there is a current "7.0" version available. "Final Draft" is more user-friendly compared to most other scriptwriting software and is widely used in the industry, more so than any other program (which, since I want to eventually make a living with my scriptwriting, is why I decided on this program).

I am not trying to bash you or your script by any means, nor am I intentionally trying to insult your intelligence: I've been writing since the age of 10 (I'm 39) and I readily admit that I'm still learning (though it's been over ten years since I was last published). I'm relatively new to scriptwriting myself (I have 2 under my belt so far), though I wrote my first play (and got it produced at school) when I was in the 6th grade. Regardless, I'm just trying to offer some friendly advice, one writer to another.

Best wishes with your script---I'm looking forward to seeing the end result (your film) if possible. :D

[death_to_all]

Thats's funny. lol. Some people have talent and some don't but I'm not critising anyone.

[Father Fitz]

If the last post is inferring that I'm critisizing this script, then well done: However, not one iota of what I wrote is meant to be cynical or derogatory, by any means. Most [professional] writers I know welcome criticism, and those outside of or not possessing this gift, or those lacking the same talent (for simplicity's sake) haven't the wherewithall to even begin to understand what writing means to one's soul, especially when it comes to expressing yourself and what you see and feel in the world around you. If you don't know what I'm talking about, then don't try to comprehend any of what I just said. You just won't get it.
MVP732 will get along just fine with or without any critique from me.