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[Stingy Jack]

Originally posted by kpropain
I'm the older than Hatebreeder, and I'm also a rational skeptic, if that helps....

Cool! Perfect fit! But, it seems to me that the older veteran may be the superstitious one ... I mean, he's been on the force longer and has seen a lot more than the younger one. I can picture the younger one just transferring into the city, and maybe he's jumpy because all of the creepy voodoo shit is new to him. I can picture a scene where the two detectives are examining a crime scene, and they notice that the blood left behind is congealed, but not dried ... like fresh blood oozed from a corpse.

Older Dick:
No, it's blood. (He crouches over a smear at the foot of the bed while donning a latex glove. He gently prods a glob and inspects it between his fingertips)

Younger Dick:
(Leaning over older Dick's shoulder) Looks like jelly. You ever see anything like this?

Older Dick:
Once or twice. A long time ago ... shortly after I joined the force. The person that bled this was already dead.

Younger Dick:
(Scoffs, but, with a look from Older Dick, regains his composure) You're serious. You mean, someone walked a dead body through here like ... like a puppet?

Older Dick:
( Standing ) Or the body walked through here itself.

Younger Dick:
( Studies Older Dick's face for signs of a joke. When he finds none:) That's fucking impossible. ( laughs softly )

Older Dick:
( still serious ) Welcome to New Orleans.

(Horrible dialogue, I know. Just demonstrating my point.)

[movieman64]

Have one of the partners become a victim, and the other have to bring a new partner up to speed. This new partner could be one who is under control of the main character and sent to manipulate or thwart the investigation.

[Je Suis Phnomne]

perhaps toss in a local legend *sorta like the who Dr. Satan thing* but this one sticks his victims in a blender. Everyone knows its him, but cant find any evidence.

[massacre man]

i want everyone to think im dead but i end up saving everyone else like i just get knocked out or on the ground because of a wound but i manage to get up and save the others

[bloodrayne]

You guys are brilliant...I love these ideas...

Stingy Jack...I can almost "see" that last scene that you posted......*Monty Burns voice*..."Excellent":cool:

[misterX]

Originally posted by Vampenguin
I personally think that mostly all the active members here should have a cameo, at the very least....like mention them or somethin, ya know? My real name's Andrew, BTW.

I also have an idea to use as a vessel to show what the detectives are like. As many detective stories do, you should put a totally unrelated case, right at the beggining, just to show how they interact with each other. Maybe it could invole the nazis? Lol

good idea but ya have t ochange my name from wufongtan(apprantly some people are touchy about hair styles)
to misterX lollollolloolloloololol

[ShankS]

great stuff here, it's coming along nicely, good character development.

[Stingy Jack]

Wow ... thanks! You guys are really supportive. I started on the rough draft last night, then decided the easiest way to do this would be to write out, in detail, all of the scenes I have in my mind on notecards. That way, I can arrange them however I want for the final product. Besides, this story seems to be getting told in a scatalogical order, anyway. :D

[ShankS]

Originally posted by Stingy Jack
............scatalogical order, anyway. :D

what we call in the Uk.. 'organised chaos' :D

[nine9]

Hey Stingy! What music will we use for this movie? That is when it is released worldwide!

Music is very important to set the whole mood..........maybe one of our musicians here could write the score.:cool: