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Old 12-18-2007, 06:15 PM
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Crab: Mmmmm, why didn't I try cat earlier? It's so nice.

I like the wording there. Made me LOL
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Old 12-19-2007, 03:51 AM
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Massacre Man: Holy shit...

Bwind gets up and spins around angrily. Zero isn't anywhere to be seen.

Bwind: You fucking idiot! You distracted me!

Bwind gets a large knife from his pocket and throws it. Massacre Man ducks out of the way and it hits the side of the wall, bounces off and goes straight into Gore's leg.

Bwind: Where is he?!

Massacre Man: How the fuck should I know?!

Bwind: Well it's not exactly dark in here, you should have seen hi-

Massacre Man: FUCK!

All the torches and other lights begin to fall down around the room. They smash and glass goes everywhere, on of the lighters falls into a small pile of string. The string sets alight, also burning a plastic torch. Black smoke begins to rise.

Bwind: That fuckers smarter than I thought!

Bwind is looking into the black smoke when Zero silently drops from the ceiling behind him.

Massacre Man: Hey Shitface, look behind you!

Bwind turns around just as Zero stabs him in the stoumach with a knife. Bwind grabs Zero's arm and slowly, pulls the knife out, then turns it around on the monkey. The two are locked in combat.

Bwind: Remember your mum. I'll let you in on a secret. I kept her arm. It tasted nice!

Zero jumps up with shuck forces that Bwind lets go. He begins frantically jumping around the cave. The smoke has by now faded and Massacre Man sees something at the cave entrance.

Crabapple: Look Paramount, it's Uncle Massacre Man!

Crab begins running towards Massacre Man, when he suddenly stops, and falls to the floor. His leg is blown off. Ferretchucker is at the cave entrance holding a gun.

Ferretchucker: There once was a man named ferret, who blew the shit out of some maniac.

Massacre Man: What the fuck is happening tonight? Why do you have that mongrel?!

Crabapple shows no signs of pain. He's very pale due to all the blood he's lost. Guns hots are still firing around and Zero can be heard shrieking. The monkey suddenly comes to a stop in front of crab and bends over. He tears his throat open. In his last ounce of strength, Crab puts his finger forward into Paramounts mouth, who starts nibbling at it.

Ferretchucker: Holy monkey balls, what the fuck is that?!

Zero turns around, looks at bwind who is reloading, then runs for ferretchucker. Ferret holds the gun out in front of him.

Ferretchucker: Go to hell!

at that moment, he sneezes and his arms contract, pulling them to his face. His face goes forward infront of the gun just as it fires. Bits of brain are everywhere.

Massacre Man: Fuck...SHOOT THE MONKEY!

Suddenly, at the entrance, two more figures appear. It's Miss Macabre and Pr3ssur3.

Pr3ssur3: In a minute, I have buisness to attend to.

He gets the gun out and aims it at Bwind.

Bwind: Bugger!
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Old 12-19-2007, 05:23 AM
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Old 12-19-2007, 05:48 AM
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thanks, I've been keeping a secret but now it doesn't matter so I'll talk about it.

At first, I had no idea of what to do. I had a rouch outline - Zero's origin, Zero kills, Massacre Man appears. But as I went along, I suddenly realized I had made loads of storylines.

1. Bwind making Zero who seeks revenge
2. Pr3ssur3 wants to escape and kill Zero
3. Massacre Man doin his thang
4. Hammerfan having a baby
5. Crab looking after that baby
6. Gore needing to kill Zero
7. Ferretchucker trying to save then kill yellow jacket (Little does he know, Yellow Jacket is already dead.)
8. Miss Macabre wanting to find Ferretchucker and Yellow Jacket.
9. Bwind seeking revenge on Zero

I was going along and I had a rough outline. It was then that I had a great idea. All these story lines should slowly combine, then ultimately, become one.

I had gore and bwind collide.
I had Massacre Man, Hammerfan and Crab collide
I had Ferret and Crab collide.
I had Miss macabre leave ferret and collide with pr3ssur3

I decided that I had to have a point where they all met. Where better in Part
7ero than Zero's cave? Also, I have an ending planned which I should post tommorow or maybe even tonight. Stay tuned!
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Old 12-19-2007, 11:46 AM
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Miss Macabre looks down and sees ferret's body on the floor. She bends over and starts crying when she notices a piece of paper in his pocket.

Miss Macabre: What the hell?

It's folded and says "DO NOT READ" on it. She unfolds it and begins reading. It's a print out of the spell that brought Yellow Jacket and Bwind back. She says the words out loud and suddenly, Both Ferret and Crab get up. Ferret's head slowly begins to heal and so does Crab's neck. Sudden;y, a shot rings through the cave and Ferret's head is blown to bits again. Pr3ssur3 fired the shot.

Miss Macabre: YOU MONSTER! YOU'RE A MURDERER!!!

Pr3ssur3: Ressuretees are wrong. And once I'm done with Bwind I'll deal with that guy over there.

Crab is cradling the crying baby.

Bwind: WAIT! Where'd the monkey go?

Pr3ssur3: Oh shit!

[I]In the loss of concentration, Bwind has time to get out another knife and throw it. It hits Pr3ssur3's arm, making him drop the gun. Bwind starts walking towards Pr3ssur3 when suddenly, he's knocked to his feet. Zero has jumped past and takes him to the floor. The two have a fist fight andblood flies everywhere. Bwind gets a good punch in on Zero's nose, making him fall back.
Bwind: There's zero chance of escape fucker.

He violently begin pounding Zero until blood is everywhere and bruises cover the monkey's face. When Zero stops moving, Bwind gets off him.

Bwind: Who next, ah yeh, you.

Miss Macabre: You mean you!

She runs at him with the knife from Pr3ssur3's arm but bwind simply puts out his foot fast and kicks her. She flies backwards into the cave wall. By this time, Crabapple has hopped over to Massacre Man.

Massacre Man: You have to put that thing down! Kill it! It's not meant for this world. FUCKING KILL IT!

Crabapple: You were my neighbor and I loved you. Our wedding day was so amazing.

Massacre Man: You've fucking lost it!

Crabapple: But now it's come to an end my dear. Give granny a kiss!

He puts down Paramount and lifts a rock from the floor. He holds it above his head and is about to smash it over the helpless Massacre Man's head when all of a sudden, he falls over backwards with a scream of pain. Gore is behind him holding a knife and blood is pouring from Crab's remaining ankle.

Gore: Help me and I'll help you, deal? I have money, lots of it, I can-

Massacre Man: It's a fucking deal if I get out alive!

Across the other side of the room, Bwind is violently slashing Pr3ssur3. Bwind stops for a moment.

Bwind: This is too simple. Maybe a lighter would help...

He walks away for a second. PR3ssur3 looks at Miss Macabre and starts talking.

Pr3ssur3: That baby thing over there...

Miss Macabre: We have to get out of here!

She stands up and goes to pulls Pr3ssur3 away but he stops her.

Pr3ssur3: Just listen! I think I know what was chasing us earlier.

Bwind: I knew I should have killed you with that tribes man.

Pr3ssur3: Please. You don't have to-

Miss Macabre stands in front of Pr3ssur3.

Miss Macabre: Before you can hurt him, you have to got through me!

Bwind: If you say so.

He spins round like he did earlier and Miss Macabre screams. She looks down and there's a huge slit along her stomauch. Bwind laughs at her then pucnhes her, picks her up and hurls her across the cave. She hits the wall near Massacre Man.

Pr3ssur3: You've...been doing weights...

Bwind: With your mum.

Pr3ssur3: You're gonna die tonight!

Bwind: How'd you work that one out?

Pr3ssur3: That wolf baby over there. It'll kill you. I know coz I'm part wolf, listen to me howl!

Pr3ssur3 begins howling into the night really loudly. Bwind silences him by leaning over and driving the blade into him. He gets right up to pr3ssur3's face.

Bwind: It's over. You're no better than that fat ape we killed all those years ago.

He lifts the knife up through Pr3ssur3's body, who is laughing until it cuts through his skull. He turns on Massacre Man, Gore and Miss Macabre. Crabapple has crawled to the other side of the cave.

Bwind: Stop right there!

He points at Crab who turns to him, horrified. Bwind picks up Paramount.

Bwind: Just to prove a point to an old, late friend of mine, I'm going to kill this thing right here, right now.

Crabapple: NO!

He begins walking backwards to the mouth of the cave.

Bwind: Then I'm gonna use the lighter in my pocket and the aerosole can that I took off my son to cook you bitches until I can draw on the wall with you!

He cocks the gun the points it at the crying Paramounts head.

Crabapple: No!

Bwind: This is so much better than clay pigeons!

At that exact moment, Bwind is thrown across the room, paramount flies from his hands and straight to crabapple. Bwind looks up to the attacked on top of him.

Massacre Man: Fuck!

Bwind: Oh mother fu-

Hammerfan roars then puts her mouth straight onto bwind's face and begins eating. Blood flies everywhere and the body writhes in pain. Eventually, she stops and turns on Crabapple.

Crabapple: Look, it's aunty hooker that I got ffrom the gas station. SHe was there when I gave birth to you!

The werewolf walks over to him and puts her face to the baby and starts licking him. Crabapple slaps her round the face.

Crabapple: Paedofile!

Hammerfan suddenly becomes savage again and grabs crabapple and breaks his neck with her teeth. She turns on Gore, Massacre Man and Miss Macabre.

Massacre Man: Hey. Please. Remember me? Me and __V__, the guy from the castle. Please leave us.

She growls, turns and picks up paramount with her teeth then bounds off.

Massacre Man: Thank fuck! I had no plan B.

Miss Macabre: Now what?

Massacre Man: Go outside, try and get a signal. Call for help.

GorePhobia: I'll go with her. With support I can walk. There could be anything in the woods.

Miss Macabre lifts Gore onto his feet and puts one arm over her shoulder. The two of them leave the cave and go further up the rockface it's in along a small path. They reach the top.

Gore: Dial this. *4#90 13##. They'll help us.

She dials the number. As it begins ringing, Gore suddenlygets his arm off her shoulder and nudges her. She falls down the side of the rockface. The phone falls to the floor just beside Gore who kneels down and begins speaking into it. The camera shows the inside of the cave and Massacre Man's eyes are closed and his head is up against the wall. The sounds of a monkey shrieking can suddenly be heard. The screen goes black, then fades to an office where some men are around a table. One man stands up.

Man: Gorephobia must be dead. Operation Zero has come to a close ladies and gentlemen, for goo-

The door opens and two men wheel in a man on a wheel chair. He is covered in stiches and bruises and there are bandages around his wrists. It's GorePhobia.

GorePhobia: Operation Zero has ended. But I have other things in mind for the future of the company.


THE END?
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Old 12-19-2007, 06:42 PM
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Old 12-19-2007, 07:11 PM
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Old 12-20-2007, 02:34 AM
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lol, thanks. It was so fun having crabby start off as, well...normal crabby (if you can call it normal) to some psychopath who thought he gave birth to a wolf baby!
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Old 12-20-2007, 04:19 AM
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Ha! See what happens when you mess with my baby?! Showed you, didn't I?! :D

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Old 12-20-2007, 05:45 AM
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Thanks. See, remember all that time ago when you thought you were dead and I said not necessarily! HA! I was right!
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