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Old 04-17-2008, 05:14 PM
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Must have been the wind
A creaking floorboard perhaps
Surely nothing more
also nice....foreboding
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Old 04-17-2008, 05:45 PM
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Running in the night
Knife in hand, he follows me
There is no escape

Ankle twists, falling down
Eyes wide, tears running down my cheeks
Helpless now, he's here

He whispers of death
Knife gleaming as it plunges
Hot breath on my face

Pain and he smiles
Blood cascades down, so cold now
Last breath leaving me

(not quite the same ones I wrote in grade school :p )
I like this one.

...

tossing and turning
a landscape of broken men
bearing down on me

sweat hits my forehead
all claws and teeth surround me
a rusty floorboard

remnants of harsh dreams
stumble numbly through my day
give me strength to sleep

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Old 04-18-2008, 05:27 AM
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I like this one.

...

tossing and turning
a landscape of broken men
bearing down on me

sweat hits my forehead
all claws and teeth surround me
a rusty floorboard

remnants of harsh dreams
stumble numbly through my day
give me strength to sleep

...
Thanks, I like this one too :)

@ newb - thanks :)
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Old 04-18-2008, 05:35 AM
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handcuffed to a dancing tumour
black blood
spiritual disease
sooths nothing
the real thing bites harder
are you her now
are you here now
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Old 04-18-2008, 09:02 AM
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handcuffed to a dancing tumour
black blood
spiritual disease
sooths nothing
the real thing bites harder
are you her now
are you here now
How is this a haiku?
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Old 04-18-2008, 08:55 PM
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How is this a haiku?
I didn't say it was
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Old 04-19-2008, 09:31 AM
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these are some great haikus - someone should publish the amazing authors of HDC!

"Bedtime"

boxsprings and mattress
sturdy wooden frame surrounds
but what waits beneath
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Old 04-19-2008, 09:33 AM
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these are some great haikus - someone should publish the amazing authors of HDC!

"Bedtime"

boxsprings and mattress
sturdy wooden frame surrounds
but what waits beneath
Oooooooo... That's fantastic, my simian friend...
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Old 04-19-2008, 09:36 AM
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monkeys invented haikus

its a well known fact!

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The Closet

Late night, hang my cloak
Stillness instantly broken
Was that breath I felt?



The End

Shot rings through the night
Blood splatters on the carpet
T'was too much to bear


Would love to hear what people thought. I don't write much.
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