Disease - re-edited

[SKOOFx]

A while back, i posted a short story i wrote while at work.

After seing all these spammers posting their writing, i figured i would go back, touch up my lil tale and then re post it for those who havent read it.

Its VERY short(so its definitly A.D.D freindly).

Enjoy.

(Im not looking to be a writer or anything, i just felt it writing it at the time- i do like writing though)

PS- please do not look at my posts as a "preview" to my writing style/"skills".

When i post, i post.
When i write ..i write.

2 different thing. I dont give a shit about proper grammer or spelling on posts.

PPS- anybody know any good magazines to submit this to?

http://www.angelfire.com/ny2/SKOOF/Disease.pdf

[SKOOFx]

I'm a daily regular here.

Somebody throw me a freakin bone and read it...lol jk

[MoonLit Meadow]

Honestly, it made me uncomfortable ;)...I don't know...the whole violence against women thing or something...the subject matter, about the thoughts of rape, etc...and I definately don't think that YOU think that way...I'm perfectly aware it's just a charachter. I just get really uncomfortable watching/reading anything that has to do with that subject...I get that way watching/reading anything that has to do with torture as well...probably why I never went to see "SAW" ;) So honestly, it's more the subject matter that didn't sit well with me...it has nothing to do with your talent as a writer.

You have alot of potential....you definately know how to use imagery to get your point across! I liked the style it was written in as well...dark, gothic...for some reason it reminds me of Poe :) I'd be interested in reading other stories of yours.

[SKOOFx]

Thanks moon,

Yeah, dont get me wrong. None of that is a reflection of myself as a person.

Ive been reading alot of dark literature lately. So one day at work, i sat down and tried to see what i could come up with.


Im personally not "proud" of the content written; its more of an attempt at high "shock value".

But thank you for complimenting my writing technique. Its very appreciated.

xoxo

[scouse mac]

Wasn't this posted here somewhere before? Remember liking it the first time round and still do. Short but nicely disturbing, be nice to hear from our man after he's done the murder.

[SKOOFx]

Thats not a bad idea!!!

i should do a 1 page short story on his lil escapades every month or so.

[novakru]

Originally posted by SKOOFx
Thats not a bad idea!!!

i should do a 1 page short story on his lil escapades every month or so.

Like a series?
Cool,but maybe not so um,well....get more into the gory/macbre side of this story instead of the.....scary for females thing:D

[MoonLit Meadow]

Originally posted by SKOOFx
Thanks moon,

Yeah, dont get me wrong. None of that is a reflection of myself as a person.

Ive been reading alot of dark literature lately. So one day at work, i sat down and tried to see what i could come up with.


Im personally not "proud" of the content written; its more of an attempt at high "shock value".

But thank you for complimenting my writing technique. Its very appreciated.

xoxo

No problem. It was a VERY good attempt...almost TOO good...with all the imagery, etc ;) LOL!

You definately have the "shock value" thing down! :p I think it's really great stuff, and I agree that you should continue to write a new story every month or so...following the same charachter...it'd be cool to see what develops!:)

If I were you, I'd start sending this stuff out to the appropriate magazines...see if you can get something published...unfortunately, I personally don't know WHO to send it to :( But I think you're on to something.

[SKOOFx]

and i think your lovely and intelligent.

<bats eyelids>
lol


jk

thanks again.

[MoonLit Meadow]

Originally posted by SKOOFx
and i think your lovely and intelligent.

<bats eyelids>
lol


jk

thanks again.

LOL! NIIIIIIICE:p :)

You're very welcome.