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04-20-2011, 08:10 PM
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Good Charactarization and the concept is interesting but you might want to do some proof reading over it and polish it up some. Especially that last page. Good job.
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04-22-2011, 09:11 AM
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I could not get into the site where your story is posted, do you have it posted anywhere else?
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