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Originally Posted by Daniel Hayes
Thanks for the encouraging words and helpful criticism fellas. Regarding the ending, I was leaving the fate of the narrator up to the reader, who could decide for his or herself why he was not willing, or able, to elaborate on any further discoveries. Also, this story was intended to form a part of a wider mythos, with each constituent element incrementally building on the wider tale, so I didn't want to give away too much in just one story. That being said, if the ending is unsatisfactory I could always add more 
I have more work in the pipeline, which I'd also like to share with you good people in the fullness of time. Thanks again. |
My only concern with the ending, especially if it is supposed to pull together into a wider world, would be if the reader doesn't feel this story is complete they may not feel propelled to check out the rest of the work. Maybe find a way to tie it into another story toward the end, that way when you start the next short, you can start it at the tie in and the reader would feel immediately brought back into the world. So maybe you add a character, and build a bit of a profile and an attachment to that character, then have that character split off or get separated from this one prior to the fall. Then the next story could concentrate on future dealings with the added character with occasional flash backs to the trip where he or she lost her friend.