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Originally Posted by Jake.Ashworth
First, you shouldn't be reading in the car... Lol. Second I welcome all criticism with open arms, so I will look back through and see what I can do about tweaking it. This is just the second revision, it will probably get two more before its close to really done. Thank you for your observations, also, I agree on that sentence, its to final. Either I end it there or I remove it. I think your right, removing it is the best call.
Thanks!
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But no one else in the car wanted to play 20 questions!
Anyway, my pleasure - look forward to reading next draft if you post it