Though Judge #3's verdict is still pending but sorry, I just like to share my appreciation on Chrono-Shimizu's Carnival of Souls.
As Judge #2 already mentioned, any true fan of the original naturally wouldn't like to bear the news of a modern remake of COS. But in the vein of a J-horror treatment from Takashi Shimuzi!!...really would be interesting to watch. Fascinating idea, Chrono! and also glad that how beautifully you plotted & developed it in a typical J-horror fashion. Particularly, I like to mention here some nice things of your COS remake treatment:
1) The little tribute or the way you gave nod to the original in the dark ride/haunted house.
2) The screeching of a metal door sound effects.
3) Mary's trance on the bus...specially when a 'man' drives a nail into his nose with a hammer...that's pretty sweet.:D
4) And finally the idea of adding Meiko Kaji in the cast.
Overall, awesome stuff, Chronogrl! Now, that's a champion's entry. :)
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Anyway, Now...about my Blind Terror remake...(:D)
Oh, I was actually thought this is going to be a disaster but eventually came out with grades better than my expectation. So thanks to the judges for their kind & honest verdicts.
Now like to clear some things that Judge#2 pointed out:
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The killer smashes the window, and then goes around to smash open the door. Why? Why not just come in through the window?
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The thing is I tried to (probably failed to portrayed it properly) make the killer's character so much menacingly unpredictable that the killer aka Arnold Jacob himself isn't sure about what's going to be his next moves regarding to kill somebody or any psychotic/destructive activity. There is no particular choice of weapons for him. He uses whatever he manages to get around anywhere. An unpredictable complete maniac with some flaws who just doesn't think much or plan carefully, otherwise Sarah wouldn't get the chance to run away from the house.
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In the rape scene you say the killer rips off Sarah's pajamas, and then immediately afterwards you say the bracelet falls in her shirt pocket. Did he rip off her clothes or not?
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Oops, sorry! I didn't clarify it properly...he just rips off her pajama pant not the entire clothing.
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You take pains to mention she knows the layout of the house very well, and then she falls down the basement stairs. This one is not so bad as she could be in a state of panic at that point.
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Yup! that's right.
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The revelation of the killer's backstory is a bit much. I'd like to see some forshadowing here. Perhaps Sarah is haunted by images of the boy that she inadvertantly killed. That way it's not completely out of the blue who the killer is.
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I agree, that would be surely better but the thing I forget to add was...Sarah actually forgot or didn't know at first that a kid was died in that accident as the others (doctors & relatives) hide that news to her for the more shock & grief that may caused to her.
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You do have several terrifying set pieces that would be very effective- the murders, the discovery of the bodies, the shootout at the gas station. The story just needs to be tightened up.
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Thank you and I agree on the last note. Actually all or any idea(s) of mine need some or in many cases severe adjustments as I'm actually pretty amateur in story telling or development parts.
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Originally Posted by Judge #1;
I was uncomfortable reading the things being done to Sarah.
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Actually, that was the intention from my side & would like to see this sorta reaction coming out from the viewers:D.
Anyway, Thank you, all.:)