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THE SECOND TEST OF HDC IDOL II - THE GOBLINS

Write an effective limerick based on any vintage horror movie of your choice. (vintage = pre-Romero's Night of the Living Dead era)

Your limerick must capture the essence of the movie.

(limerick = 5-line meter in the rhyme scheme of a-a-b-b-a)


Chronogrl's entry -

For this challenge I chose The Incredible Shrinking Man (1957) - This is a film that is near and dear to my heart and when I think of "classic horror" as well as "films that introduced me to the genre," this is certainly one of them. It was one of my dad's favorite movies, and I would watch it with him over and over again... But what really sticks with me about this film isn't necessarily the nostalgia value - It always struck me, even as a young girl, as an incredibly and profoundly sad and hopeless tale - Here is a story of loneliness, of isolation, of literally being diminished to the point of irrelevance - Becoming smaller in (overwhelmed by) a world that cannot help or that does not care... This literal and figurative sense of being absolutely and uncontrollably overwhelmed by the world is the essence that I wanted to capture in my limerick:

Radiation has taken its toll
This shrinking I cannot control
It's not just that I'm tiny;
All my hopes have been stymied -
The world has swallowed me whole

Judge #1's verdict -

A very good effort. Good rhythm. I would transpose the first two lines- introduce the character and the problem first, and the cause second.

Grade B

Judge #2's verdict -

Inspired. Understands the point, captures the tone to a certain extent. Keep working and growing.

B

Judge #3's verdict -

I give Chrono a B.

I like the fact that Chrono gave a little background as to why she chose that particular movie.

OVERALL GRADE - B.




The Villain's entry -

A bomb was dropped
and a giant lizard popped
out of the ocean floor
to let out a roar
that said Godzilla cannot be stopped

Judge #1's verdict -

The rhythm is off. The first 2 lines should match, in length. If you changed the first line to read "A bomb on Tokyo was dropped" it would scan better.

Grade C.

Judge #2's verdict -

Arrhythmic. Doesn't really convey the feel of the movie, which is dead serious. Disappointing. But, I'm going to reward you with a higher grade for having the courtesy to submit something.

Villain, you get a C.

Judge #3's verdict -

I give Villain a C.

OVERALL GRADE - C