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THE SECOND TEST OF HDC IDOL II - THE OGRES

Write a short horror story in about 200 words, using words starting from A to Z in the story (at least once). Please note that no alphabet should be left out.


Roshiq's entry -

The Town Where Death Comes Slowly


"Many Years ago there’s an Indian family moved into this small town of Zanesfield, Ohio. After some weird incidents of death beginning to occur around them, the town folks started to blame them for practicing some sort of black magic. They burned their house down and that killed every one of them. But that just unleashed a terrible curse that every generation of inhabitants lived from that time has no escape from it.”

Dr. Boris then stops for a moment. Xavier was listening, sitting in a sofa, looking tired & shocked.

"And the curse is here human death comes quietly, with fantastic symptoms." Dr. Boris continues. "At first, people just start to notice you less as if you don’t exist anymore. Next you'll lose your shadows in broad daylight. Then your images will starts to disappear from everything, people captured & stored. And finally you'll lose reflection in the mirror. Many tried to get rid of it, even by moving into other towns but none succeed. It's like one of those rare, pathetic diseases where you know you're going to die soon but nothing can help you out."

Xavier stops the video, picks the hand mirror & sees...yup, he's fading.

Judge #1's verdict -

I give roshiq a B-.

I enjoyed the story, and actually wanted more. I found myself wishing it was a novel.

Judge #2's verdict -

You used every letter, as instructed, and you came in at 199 words. You fulfilled the requirements of the assignment. You also crafted a complete story - beginning, middle and end. Despite some minor language issues, you did a good job.

GRADE: B

Judge #3's verdict -

I respect that this is the first time you've written a story in English, but, I don't feel right factoring that into my score. Publishers and producers wouldn't take that into consideration and neither will I. Fairly creative, but there's a lot of awkward usage and you've gotta grade writing on writing.

C-

Overall Grade - C+