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Originally Posted by ChronoGrl
No problem - More than happy to. Really wish that I had the motivation, drive, equipment, etc. to put together a short film of my own - I know it's not an easy task, so I don't want to rip apart what is clearly a true effort.
Hey - If you're a comedy writer and it's what you're comfortable with, why not do a horror comedy? I mean, you could take the source material (Barnacle Bill) and turn it into a fun cheese-fest instead of something serious, you know? Then you can take the voice over and make it even MORE over the top and it'll be successful.
Also: Two REALLY nit-picky things... The opening shot, the guy sitting in the boat - for some reason I couldn't help but focus on his, uhm, crack. :o
And our first scene in the car, I'm not sure why our heroine goes from complaining about her small town to screaming outside the car - She goes from frustrated and angry to fun-loving. Just an odd transition. Why not just make her a stereotype backwoods slut? Again, going for the comedy aspect of it might be more fun. :)
Then again, I'm sure a lot of people give you "suggestions" - It's up to you in the end. Good luck with your next endeavors - Keep posting them here! I'd love to see where they go!.
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Yeah, I put the butt crack in there in the beginning because I wasn't taking myself seriously, I knew the film was going to be flawed and majorly flawed at that. The guy in the boat is a good high school friend, as is everyone one in the film, so it was just so every-time he watches it, we see his ass crack.. hahaha, plain and simple.
as far as the girl's emotions in the car, the scene was actually supposed to start with her screaming outside of the car, then going into the dialogue, but what happened was on the shoot day we ran behind schedule. I lost two dialogue scenes, and a transition scene, that ties the scene to next one.. I also lost scenes at the party, so I started having to get creative with the edit. Which is a reason why it took me so long to complete. this is far from what it's meant to look like.. there are a lot of things in the movie, that I am like what??? but whatever..
If you want to check out what I've been doing, I actually work for def jam and thelifefiles.com, as well as run my own production company..
www.acrossthebridgeproductions.com and then more of my personal work can be found at
http://youtube.com/acrossthebridgemd
I know my website sucks, but I am looking for someone to step that game up..
As far as a comedy/horror that is exactly what I plan on doing with Blood in the Bay feature length.. Its going to be kind of Eastbound and Down meets Halloween