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Old 04-02-2010, 09:23 AM
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Originally Posted by Doc Faustus View Post
No, I'm saying that Creative Writing Workshops are really annoying.
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I was so incredibly disillusioned by my creative writing classes in college - They always dissected the wrong things, missed the point, and their own submissions didn't have much imagination at all. I HATED it - The only good part was that it forced me to write, something that I do not make time for anymore... :(


But back to your story: My biggest issue is the same issue that I had with your first one; the tense... You go from present tense to past tense - I suggest just making it past tense; as Doc mentioned, the folky aspect of it is really fantastic - I felt as though this was more of an oral tale than a written narration; great tone.
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