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Old 04-20-2009, 02:33 PM
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I'm sorry to say, one very short phrase did let you down. You had the old woman reading a surfing magazine.

Just thought that might be amusing and different. Didnt want to have her reading knitting monthly or some celeb magazine.



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Still, the entire paragraph where you had him reject the old woman's dentures was not necessary. It was a good read, but you had already completed the task and you did not need that in there..

Thought Id best explain why she wasnt killed like the other two and emphasise the motivation behind Franklins actions. I understand your point about it being superfluous to the task though.
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