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Originally Posted by The Gate Master
I'm sorry to say, one very short phrase did let you down. You had the old woman reading a surfing magazine.
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Just thought that might be amusing and different. Didnt want to have her reading knitting monthly or some celeb magazine.
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Originally Posted by The Gate Master
Still, the entire paragraph where you had him reject the old woman's dentures was not necessary. It was a good read, but you had already completed the task and you did not need that in there..
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Thought Id best explain why she wasnt killed like the other two and emphasise the motivation behind Franklins actions. I understand your point about it being superfluous to the task though.