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Old 11-15-2007, 08:57 PM
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Originally Posted by Zero View Post
to be totally honest i found some of the line-by-line writing to be too wordy and awkward. almost trying too hard to be poetic.

overall a lovely tone - but i'd recommend working for a mix of sentence structures (also there are some awkward tense-shifts)
Not the tense-shifts! I do fall prey to those.

I really enjoy being overly descriptive with my words; one reason has to do with my love of Lovecraft, who similarly uses adjectives on adjectives. If it is my style, perhaps I can continue to do so? What do you think, Zero?

I wrote this a while ago as well, perhaps I have improved now. I will post my next podcast episode to get some opinions. And this time I will post it in the right category.... I only realized there was a horror fiction category after I started this thread.
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