Here is what it looks like after I did a bit of work on the dialogue.
MISSING PERSONS
EXT. HIGHWAY - NIGHT
The scene opens to a dark night. A highway is in shot. Only the light of the highway brightens the scene. A pair of headlights is seen coming on screen. From a distance the car drives towards the camera passing some stores and a restaurant. The camera closes in on the car and then scene switches. Two teens are riding in the car. One is a male and one is a female. They are smoking a nice sized joint.
INT. CAR - CONTINUOUS
SKYLAR
Baby this shit is good isn’t it?
She passes the joint back to the male.
VINCENT
(looks at SKYLAR coldly)
It’s not bad. But I Hope we find a place to crash soon, cuz I’m dead tired.
SKYLAR
Yeah I am ready to pull over and call it a night.
VINCENT nods and then rests his head. In a matter of seconds he is already out cold.
SKYLAR turns the knob of the radio on and puts some music on. Playing is Stereomud’s Stepping Away. She continues to drive.
EXT. GAS STATION - NIGHT
Ahead we see a gas station. She turns on her turn signal and begins to turn into the gas station. She pulls up and gets out of the car. She puts the pump into the tank and then goes towards the store attached to the gas station. She approaches what seems to be a bathroom.
INT. GAS STATION BATHROOM - CONTINUOUS
She enters and it’s a small beat up looking bathroom. She enters a stall and pulls out a vile of coke. It is already cut up as she makes a line right on the toilet paper dispenser. She takes a big hit and then bends her head back to let it rush. She seems already messed up as it hits her.
SKYLAR
My dealer was right this blow is amazing.
She rubs her nose and packs up her coke vile. She puts it into her hand bag. When she looks back up, she screams as she sees VINCENT standing behind her.
SKYLAR
(Startled)
Vincent….what the fuck!!??
VINCENT
Sorry I scared you babe.
SKYLAR
That’s ok baby, did you come inside to do some of this with me?
SKYLAR rubs some of the coke on VINCENT’S lips and licks the powder off his lips, while pressing against him, oblivious to the cold, pained look on his face.
VINCENT
(taking her face in his hands)
Skylar, I need to ask you something?
SKYLAR
You wanna do this blow with me?
VINCENT
No, I want to know if you love me?
SKYLAR
(now kissing his hand, the coke taking effect, doesn’t notice his eyes staring intently into hers)
Vinnie baby
(pauses)
you know I
(eyes move from VINCENT’S)
love...
As the word love leaves her lips, VINCENT backhands her, sending her sprawling to the floor. Holding her jaw, SKYLAR watches in mute horror as VINCENT walks towards the bathroom door and locks it.
VINCENT
Wrong answer! You see Skylar I know all about the little secret you’ve been hiding from me!
VINCENT notices SKYLAR trying to get up, and he kicks her in the stomach, sending her back to the ground.
SKYLAR
V- Vince, Wh-what the hell are you talking about? I haven’t been hiding anything from you!
Hearing this, VINCENT grabs SKYLAR by the throat, slams her against the wall, lifts her off her feet, and begins choking her.
VINCENT
Still?! Still you lie to me? How can you straight up say that to my face when I know all about it. I am not stupid! I promised you the world. Why do you think I brought you along with me? We were going to become the modern day Bonnie and Clyde but you just had to do it didn’t you!
The scene will be inter-cut with close-ups of SKYLAR being choked, VINCENT’S eyes, and her feet dangling off the ground until there is a low gurgle, and then VINCENT, realizing what he just did slowly lowers her to the ground, kisses her on the forehead, and takes a small box out of his pocket. VINCENT opens the box, takes the object out, and the camera sees him tie an engagement ring to a black piece on string, which he then wears as a necklace. As VINCENT washes his hands, he hears another car pulling up to the gas station, and he peers out of the door.
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EXT. GAS STATION - NIGHT
Another car begins to pull into the gas station. It is another two teens. One is a male and the other a female. The male gets out to pump the gas. He notices the car in front of them. The car door is ajar. The male walks up to the car. He looks inside noticing pictures on the driver’s seat. One of them is crumbled up. He picks them up looking at them. The pictures consist of SKYLAR doing drugs, her killing someone, her dancing around with a bottle of Ever Clear, and finally of her kissing another man.
**FLASHBACK SEQUENCE BEGINS**
We see a tall, stocky man carrying a case of beer. He is walking towards a house. He knocks on the door and waits a moment. The door opens and we see SKYLAR. She smiles as the man enters. The screen fades to black. It fades back in to clothes on the ground scattered around. It fades out again. Fade back in to see SKYLAR and this mystery man kissing. Fade out.
**FLASHBACK SEQUENCE ENDS**
The scene cuts back to the man at the car. He seems shocked at what he sees. He begins to back up and he sees something in the back seat. It is a dead body in the back seat of the car. He begins to frantically stumble backward.
REBECCA
Steve what the hell is wrong?
STEVE
Nothing Becca, get in the car now!
REBECCA
But what is it?
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