[Disease]

Ok, I haven't read it all yet, but I have a few critisisms...

Instead of saying what seems to be a joint you should say what it is, it's a screenplay and needs as much detail as you can give it... so it should read "They are smokeing a joint" maybe even with more detail again..

Also you wrote "she pulls out a big bag of coke" then when she is putting it away it is a vile? it needs to be one or the other...

I'll read on.