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Originally Posted by The STE
Not bad, especially considering the mess my first one turned out to be.
a few notes:
0:37 - I heard a voice, sounded like someone off-screen say "now" or "go" or something.
0:38 - stray frames, should cut it a bit more precisely here
0:39-0:40 - the girl spikes the lense
0:49-1:11 - nice job not getting the camera's reflection in the car
Credits - I wouldn't use a red font for stuff you're posting on YouTube, preferably in general unless you can get a really high res output. Red text never looks good.
1:11-1:26 - I would've broken this into different camera angles to make it not seem so long.
1:26-1:36 - same here
1:36 - While neat for using in home-done stuff, the transition doesn't fit the mood you seem to be going for.
1:36-1:42 - While it's hard as hell to work the camera while driving, watch your framing here. His head's a bit too far to the left in the frame, it feels kindof awkward. Same with the subsequent shots of the driver. Good work using the camera while driving, though, or however you did this shot.
2:02-2:13 - You broke the 180 line here. The car should be going the opposite direction. It looks like they're heading back the way they came.
2:36-2:41 - Excellent framing here, with her opening the door and getting out right into the middle of the frame. Might want to trim a little bit at the beginning, though.
2:59-3:05 - The first shot should be before the second guy is in the woods already. The OS voice seems like he's still standing in close proximity to the girl.
3:02 - black frame between shots
5:39-5:43 - HA!
6:03-6:15 - EXCELLENT framing here.
6:19-6:20 - HAHAHAHAHA!!!! "Right THERE!"
6:19-6:20 - I had to watch that part again. "Right THERE!" Hehehe.
7:09-7:10 - "LEAVE US ALONE!" HA! You should just have a movie of that guy yelling things. It can be a buddy movie with your guy and my Change Wanting Customer.
6:54-7:44 - You should've had something with an orange glow sitting where you added the fire to give the fire more presence.
8:28-8:31 - Nice.
6:19-6:20 - "Right THERE!" Haha. That never gets old.
8:31-8:36 - Nice shot there. But for a last shot I would've gone with a wide shot of a clearing in the woods, maybe one with a lot of dead trees if you found one.
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Thanks for the detailed notes. (I saw this over at CWA too.) Once I get the time, I'll rewatch it with your notes in mind & see if I can pick out the spots you are talking about, but I really appreciate the in depth feedback.