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Excellent writing--quite polished for a first draft, if that's what it is.
I definitely got a great sense of the character. I was surprised when I learned he was only 37. I felt he was much older than that, and maybe that is what you intended--I think it is.
Might be a bit stereotypical (aged rock star, feeling lonely, used, spent), but it seems to be working so far.
Good luck on finishing it up!
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