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I liked it also, but some tips.
Remove the 'loser' segment in the Mother's line about the father going to Ernie's. Remove the "Mommy? Mom?" line from the kid. INSTEAD, have him simply look at the murder blankley, uncaring, them back at the screen. Like mentioned before, do a face closeup shot with the lights flickering on his face and the sound in the background of F13.
I like the 911 call idea, but I was also thinking it would be better if it just finish on the kid's closeup.
CK - dear LORD that woman is a HORRID actress.
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