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Old 04-28-2006, 04:07 PM
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Originally posted by Zero
No offense intended but. . .

when the first sentence is as torturous as this:

"“Wake up,” A loud voice boomed throughout the small two room, two story house which a set of twins shared with their parents, a quiet and reserved mother and a loud and unruly father."

I stop reading instantly. . .
Ha! That's what I thought, but everyone else said it was good. That's the last time I listen to people. Thanks.
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