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Ok. I'll give you some feedback. Just make sure you understand that I'm being blunt because I'm a writer. This is not meant to be mean-spirited, just helpful.
1.) No self-respecting writer who gets paid/wants to get paid for their work is going to just throw a bunch of ideas at you when you give them a single line of plot. P2P writing help is based on feedback and the strong/weak points of your story. This is your baby, not ours; we're not going to write it for you.
That being said, what I'm getting out of this is: Boy sees clone, clone tries to kill boy. That's it? That's pretty vague, but I'll pop you some questions that might help you give us some more to work with.
Q: How does he know it's a clone? You said there's no lab/science involved, so how does your main character know it's not just some guy who bears a striking resemblance?
Q: Are you building mystery around this clone? Why he's there, where he came from & why he's trying to kill your hero? I'll state right now, that if a clone just pops up and starts chasing your hero trying to off him for no reason: it's pretty bad. I personally wouldn't watch it, and I'd gather that a lot of others wouldn't, either.
I'll throw you a bone and give you an idea to build around, though. Why don't you try having part of the story deal with your heros' self doubt. Say something happens to the point where he wonders if HE's the one who's the clone, not his counterpart trying to kill him. That might start to make it a little more interesting.
I really can't help you more unless you give me some more to go on. Hope that helps so far.
-Flayed
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