hi i always wanted to be a horror writer but i need some fans opinions heres a short story i done if u can tell me how i done be honest i hope its good and what would u rate it...............
it was a dark summer in 2006 i was driveing to a nearby abandoned house i saw a man pick up a girl and she was screaming i thought it was the mans daughter my cellphone had no signal i began to panic . he started to drive off and my cellphone rang he said tell one word u saw and ill shoot u how did he get my number ... i began to drive around the car to look at the window but the window was tinted i couldnt see inside the strange man said ill let u go but he lived on 40 acres and he let her go and he grabbed a gun and went to hunt his prey meanwhile he shot her in the heart her chest was bleeding ....... i began to walk around his land and i saw him and i began to try to find a women then i noticed the person i was hunting was me there was no phone call....