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You need to change "there" to "their" in the second to last line, publishers won't publish work with typos EVER.
This seems like a story moreso than a poem (in the fact that I don't really know what you're trying to say to the reader). Poems usually have a message, and this poem's really only seems to be "death is scary".
You said be honest. :(
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MISINTUPITATED- The act of removing the spine by use of fire.
DEVESTED- The removal of one's vest.
SCTUPP- To deficate on a woman after nonconsensual sex.
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