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Old 01-21-2005, 09:40 PM
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like poems?

Ok i know theres an art section for this crap but who really looks there anyways.

So i wrote two poems during the summer and well here they are

This is my first poem, so i dont know who good it really is.

Lazy Hazy Days of Summer by Jay

summer night im so bored
walk on over to her front door

ring the bell her she comes
now its time to have some fun

grab her hand away we go
above our heads flies the crow

drive up to the moutain peak
i grab the knife that i have sneaked

stab her 19 times of gore
now she lie apon moutain floor


and thats the first one. so critique it please, and maybe ill give my poem that is dedicated and inspired by Ted Bundy
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