[Stingy Jack]

Okay. If you want to present your character as a contradiction, that's cool. You do it effectively! :D No criticisms there. I just thought that quote was something that you personally felt strongly about, and wanted us to specifically associate with that character.

As for the nightmares, sounds like an interesting technique. I'd like to see it play out. But, one more "detail" thing ... when your protagonist sees the vision in the mirror, you take some time to describe this vision before the character weilds a plunger and pisses all over the place (very funny scene ... hope you didn't want us to take it too seriously). I think this interrupts the flow of the narrative. While you are describing the apparition (if that's what it is), we picture the protagonist just standing in the mirror gazing at this guy the whole time the description is being read. Of course, the action didn't really flow like that. He saw the guy in the mirror, and immediately grabbed the plunger and peed all over the place. I think you should have waited until then, after he whirls around to face the guy, to describe what your protagonist saw. Wait for a lull in the action before you begin to supply lengthy descriptions. It keeps the flow of the narrative going.

I know I said I couldn't wait to read the rest of your story, but I think I want to wait until you have even more posted before I read it. Otherwise, you will be hearing my comments the whole way and I don't want to affect your story that way. You know? Kind of like a "I should butt out of it and let him handle it for a while" attitude. No offense. :)