Thread: since nobody reads the fiction forum im gonna post this here
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Old 07-08-2004, 11:30 AM
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Not bad jay. But, would the streets call out to him if they didn't want him there? Also,I would change the name of the main character. Your calling him Mar for short .....just doesn't do it for me.
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