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Originally Posted by Toddallthingshorror
Hey thanks for watching. What didn't you like. Im seeking feedback from people other than friends who probably wouldn't tell me like it is haha.
Ad for more, we're shooting this friday.
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I'll start with what I like about pizza man. I love that you tried. I've worked on a few small film projects and I know how much effort it takes to even get to the filming process, so good on ya for just doing it.
I enjoyed some of the camera angles and the framing. It contributed quite a bit to the general atmosphere of the short.
Other than Otis, I don't know of any other film that features a killer pizza man, and Otis didn't do his killings while on the clock. Nice work there.
Nice economical and effective script.
What I didn't like.
Well, I usually keep it all positive, but since you asked�
I think a short filmed at home or a friends home, shouldn't have so many sound issues. It's one thing that your lack of budget shouldn't have a profound impact on. Re-shoot, dub or something. You're shooting indoors, in a controlled environment, in a place that ( I assume ), you have liberal access to. Sound shouldn't be so troubling. I do speak from some experience, please keep that in mind.This isn't a bitch fest, it's meant to be constructive and I hope it comes off that way.
I didn't like the performance of your lead. I didn't hate it either. There just seemed to be an energy level that the role called for, that he didn't reach. Still, assuming he's not a professional actor, bravo to him. Takes balls to get in front of a camera and emote.
These are my main complaints and they were enough to doom the short for me. If you don't like the lead talents performance, it pretty much kills any chance of loving the material. He did a nice job in the Halloween short, so maybe it was the role itself? Dunno.
Anyway, I like what you're doing, and I think the writing in Pizza Man was quite good. I hope to see more of your work here. If these are your first productions, I'm extremely impressed.