On Hell's Hallowed Ground
 

Another of my shorts available to read ...

http://www.scribd.com/doc/52085376/O...allowed-Ground

Let me know what you think.

I liked your story. Im not a writer or critic but I know what I like and dont like, and I thought your story was very good. You may need to improve on some of your phrasing but Im sure that will come with experience. But it is fast-paced, and keeps moving and kept me interested. Your style reminds me of some of the pulp writers from the 1930's, like Robert E. Howard, Edmond Hamilton and Peaslee Wright and some of Jack London's stories. Keep up the good work.