The Process of Elimination
 

I have written a 5 page script to enter in a contest this month. It's not horror, but there's killing in it. It's a hitman script called The Process of Elimination. If anyone would like to look it over and offer their brutally honest opinion (If you think it sucks, I want to know about it and if you can pinpoint why you think it sucks then even better because I still have a week to fix it.), it'd be greatly appreciated.

Note: This is a completely different script than the one discussed in the logline thread in the general forum.

Can I read it?

Sure, I'll send it over.

One thing I should mention...

The only rule for the contest is this...

Monologue: The script can contain as many characters as you want, but only 1 of them can have any lines.