like poems?
 

Ok i know theres an art section for this crap but who really looks there anyways.

So i wrote two poems during the summer and well here they are

This is my first poem, so i dont know who good it really is.

Lazy Hazy Days of Summer by Jay

summer night im so bored
walk on over to her front door

ring the bell her she comes
now its time to have some fun

grab her hand away we go
above our heads flies the crow

drive up to the moutain peak
i grab the knife that i have sneaked

stab her 19 times of gore
now she lie apon moutain floor


and thats the first one. so critique it please, and maybe ill give my poem that is dedicated and inspired by Ted Bundy

AMK .. still have the FBI's number handy ?

LOL Urg!!

Ummm...it's very dark.

It has a Nick Cave edge to it, thats for sure.

That was cool in its own way. I could actually see it all happening which was cool.

My favorite poems have always been by Sakespeare and Edgar Allan Poe.

Don´t quit your day job..... It SUCKED!!!!

:cool:

fish heads fish heads
rolly polly fish heads
fish heads fish heads
eat them up, yum.


no i didnt write that gem.


wish i had've though.

Wow



Thats really good! Cree[y...but thats what makes it so kool!

Sounds like a commercial for......................................FISH HEADS!

Buy them! They're at your local grocer now!

Where the hell is that from?!?!

I was in a musical last year, and my character was Master Fish. These two girls who are like 9 years old [Also the cast] recited that whenever they saw me. It was really odd.