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ferretchucker 05-09-2009 01:31 PM

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Originally Posted by massacre man (Post 804779)
Oh, wow! I just noticed that's your character's name as well! Boy, is my face red! ;)

Next part will come soon, I have school all week and prom is Saturday.So next piece either Friday night or Sunday. Sit tight, folks!

Ha, ha. Very funny! :p:rolleyes:

Enjoy your prom tonight!

Doc Faustus 05-09-2009 02:18 PM

Hope your prom goes great.

massacre man 05-11-2009 03:46 PM

Sorry I missed posting yesterday, I didn't sleep Saturday night so I spent Sunday catching up. This is a short one, but it introduced the main antagonist.

CHAPTER 3

INT. TWILIGHT CITY, PSYCHIATRIST'S OFFICE - DAY

A small room in a small building. The only decoration is a diploma with a frame cracked down the middle. Two chairs sit in the center. In the chair with it's back to the door is DAVID ARTAUD, a tortured-looking soul trying to distract from the seemingly-permanent frown and rings under his eyes with a clean-shaven face, well-kept hair, a dress shirt and dress pants. In the other chair, DR. KELLER, chewing on his pen, his black slicked-back hair reaches the collar of his shirt. Dr. Keller takes his pen out of his mouth, it's covered in dents from his teeth, the two men begin to speak very softly.

DR. KELLER
So, David. Tell me why you decided to come back to see me. Last we spoke you told me that the only thing I was good for was making your wallet lighter.

ARTAUD
Well, I've been blacking out lately.

DR. KELLER
Are you sure this is a problem you should be taking up with me and not a physician?

ARTAUD
I've seen one already and they couldn't find any physical reasoning behind it.

DR. KELLER
I see. Has there been any extra pressure in your life lately?

ARTAUD
Nothing that wasn't caused by the blackouts.

DR. KELLER
Right. What do you feel before you black out?

ARTAUD
I feel kind of lightheaded. Then my condition gets worse.

DR. KELLER
The voices?

ARTAUD
Yes. The voices, instead of the thoughts about death and suffering are replaced with voices urging me to bring death and suffering-

Dr. Keller places the pen back into his mouth.

ARTAUD (CONT'D)
And it's just one voice.

Dr. Keller leaves the pen in his mouth as he speaks.

DR. KELLER
And what did you say this voice's name was?

ARTAUD
His name his Momus.

DR. KELLER
Right, Momus. Now, David, would you mind if i asked a question?

ARTAUD
No, go ahead.

DR. KELLER
Would you mind if I published an article about your condition?

ARTAUD
What? Yes, I mind.

DR. KELLER
Your name would be anonymous and I'd be willing to give you a portion of the pay.

Artaud looks into space and starts to blink

DR. KELLER
David, are you okay?

CUT TO:

INT. TWILIGHT CITY, DAVID ARTAUD'S APARTMENT - DAY

David's apartment isn't very large, but it isn't cramped either. It's perfect for a single man. He's asleep in his bed, he rolls over and opens his eyes and looks at the blinking digital clock, which he hasn't reset since the power outage. He walks into the kitchen to look at the clock on the wall.

ARTAUD
Four? Already?

David turns and runs to a computer desk and boots up. Next to the mouse rests Dr. Keller's teeth-mark covered pen.

The_Return 05-11-2009 05:10 PM

Well done man...brief as it is, he's perfect so far. Pumped to see how he fits in to the story!

Doc Faustus 05-11-2009 05:16 PM

Good work. By the way, Return, cool use of the Greek god of shame. Pretty obscure deity.

The_Return 05-11-2009 06:05 PM

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Originally Posted by Doc Faustus (Post 805939)
By the way, Return, cool use of the Greek god of shame. Pretty obscure deity.

Haha, thanks. Always been a fan of the Greek pantheon, and I though he fit what I was trying to go for with the character.

Doc Faustus 05-11-2009 06:06 PM

I find it amazing that the Greeks even had a god of shame.

Papillon Noir 05-12-2009 05:50 AM

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Originally Posted by Doc Faustus (Post 805951)
I find it amazing that the Greeks even had a god of shame.

I thought he was the god of mockery and writers?

Doc Faustus 05-12-2009 05:52 AM

Mockery through blame or censure. I've also heard shame.

ferretchucker 05-12-2009 07:51 AM

A very good addition to the piece. I liked the subtlety of it, just simply showing his pen.


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