I heard that it is opening in theatres this summer, but i could be wrong

Read the script I made and it will change most of your arguments.

michaelvspinhead.cjb.net

Oh and the plots in this do connect rather well.

oh and before u read the script pay a visit to the synopsis. It's pretty "well-worded."

You are wrong.Its not gunna happen.

how do u know that. Im gonna laugh my ass off if it comes out and see the look on your face

good script, but i still like the idea that pinhead is part of michaels family

You should change the script around, give pinhead better and creepier quotes because you are just copying from the movies.

Make pinhead do cooler stuff to michael ex. at the end it should show michael getting tortured by the hooks and chains, and the hellraiser classic of the head exploding.

USE YOUR IMAGINATION.

I think that the collector is right chance it around it would make it seem more realisitic than it already is.
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Imagination is only the base of whats real and whats not and thats what really counts in this world. Pinhead would win overall and he needs some new creepy quotes.
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to tell the truth, when I made this script I had only seen 2 of the Hellraiser movies. Now that I read over it, it makes no sense. My plan: to eventually redue this whole thing, and maybe make their fight take place in a different time... And I'm not talking about another case of Jason X.

Well it doesn't really matter that much, there is always a first time to everything. It doesn't matter if a person isn't terrific at something as long as they get the general idea and keep an audience well into it then it will be fine. The main thing a writer of scripts for films or whatever has to pay attention to is the intrigue and interest of the story. What makes it so great? Will the audience stay awake for the whole duration of the film?

Intrigue is something that is of great importance and shouldn't be ignored. To catch the audience's attention you have to try and make the story of the film interesting and most of all intriging so that they won't get bored and enjoy it.

I'm only an amateur writer but I thought that you wouldn't mind some advice seeing as you seem so down on yourself. You can send me the script via e-mail and I can read it and give feedback on it for you. I don't criticise other people's work so don't feel too obliged.
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It's [email protected], ok MVP?
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michaelvspinhead.cjb.net
Just go there. The script link is there.

I have a little advice for you MVP. Rent all the hellraiser movies before you do anything. have you seen any halloween movies

sorry MVP but i have to agree with the collector on this one. it seems that you haven't the slightest idea what Hellraiser and Halloween are about. i advise you to watch the movies and then rewrite the script in a totally different way. it has no real story line, well it does sort of but it doesn't make a lot of sense. well at least you tried thats one thing.
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Couldnt have said it better myself

I own all the halloween and hellraiser movies now, and I see that it doesnt make much sense. Right now I am doing the script over. It shall take place in 1978. The only other thing I can say is that is has a lot to do with Hellraiser 3 and Halloween: The Curse of Michael Myers.

I am also using this script to make an actual hour and a half movie with like 20 of my friends. So far I made a couple props including a puzzle box and ball. In this movie all forms of the box will come into play. Any other suggestions or questions please post.

It shouyld just be pinhead, because he is a pussy if he has the other cenobites fighting to

Yeah just put Pinhead in it the other Cenobites aren't as scary and are really annoying.

no no chatterer is awesome


like have pinhead test michael by sending chatterer to fight him

Yeah well I think that the chatterer is cool too but I don't think that Pinhead would call upon him to fight. I think that he would rather torture Michael himself.

I was thinking of having the Chatterer in it but the costume would be too expensive to buy, so I'll probably just have Pinhead.

Do you think I should make Michael be sort of a badass and interrupt one of Pinhead's quotes with a knife slash, or just have him stand there.

I think that in one scene you should have Pinhead saying one of his famous quotes and then MIchael slashing at him with a knife and then pissing PInhead off so that he has no choice but to get MIchael back.

no like see if he is really worthy of getting the torture

Yeah he has to be really worth otherwise it's stupid. I think that Pinhead should remove MIchael's mask.

I have always wondered whar michaels face looks like, due to all the beatings he has had, getting burned, shot and beaten to death by loomis in part 5 and tommy in part 6. Dont you guys wonder that?

Yeah I wonder what he does look like now? IN the first Halloween when Laurie struggles with him towards the end his mask goes up. It's all distorted and his eyes are really dark.

i bet he looks horrifying, but i think he would have burns, scars, and dents

Yeah well it can't not look any different because he has been hurt a lot and won't die. I think that he will be even more ugly than he was in the first Halloween.

yeah

Heres a thought Jason And Michael are one and the same. Two split personalites conjured up to ease the suffering of a psychotic child locked away down the dank corridors of some pedophiles basement.

Yeah that is something, they are very alike Michael and Jason that maybe just maybe they are one and the same. Which was out first Halloween or Friday the 13th one could have been adapted from the other.

Halloween (1978)
Friday The 13th (1980)

It's a good thing this script isn't being offered for sale...A good script writing program (like "Final Draft") might come in handy to clean this thing up and give it some credibility and usability.
Good luck with it. :)

im redoing the script using StoryView or something like that.

MVP732...

If you haven't taken the time to compare the likes of "Final Draft" and "Story View", I strongly urge you to do so before you spend your money. Neither of these software programs are cheap but they're also not outrageously expensive, especially if you plan on using either one to churn out more than a couple of scripts.

I don't know how old you are, what level of education you've attained or even how long you've been writing (scripts, et al), but I'd venture to say that (from reading your script) you've got a long way to go before you get good at this thing. That's not to say that you don't have a talent (it's obvious that you do) but rather that there are weaknesses in your script involving presentation (structure), grammar, spelling, plot/premise, and even dialogue. Overall, production value isn't necessarily an issue since you're not selling the script. Fortunately, you've got the balls to display your unfinished work on the web for the whole world to see, and there's not a lot of people reading this (or your script) who can claim the same. Please read on, I'm on your side...

As far as my mentioning "Final Draft", I currently (for a 'ghost story-with-a-devilish-twist' script I'm working on) use the "6.0" version but there is a current "7.0" version available. "Final Draft" is more user-friendly compared to most other scriptwriting software and is widely used in the industry, more so than any other program (which, since I want to eventually make a living with my scriptwriting, is why I decided on this program).

I am not trying to bash you or your script by any means, nor am I intentionally trying to insult your intelligence: I've been writing since the age of 10 (I'm 39) and I readily admit that I'm still learning (though it's been over ten years since I was last published). I'm relatively new to scriptwriting myself (I have 2 under my belt so far), though I wrote my first play (and got it produced at school) when I was in the 6th grade. Regardless, I'm just trying to offer some friendly advice, one writer to another.

Best wishes with your script---I'm looking forward to seeing the end result (your film) if possible. :D

Thats's funny. lol. Some people have talent and some don't but I'm not critising anyone.

If the last post is inferring that I'm critisizing this script, then well done: However, not one iota of what I wrote is meant to be cynical or derogatory, by any means. Most [professional] writers I know welcome criticism, and those outside of or not possessing this gift, or those lacking the same talent (for simplicity's sake) haven't the wherewithall to even begin to understand what writing means to one's soul, especially when it comes to expressing yourself and what you see and feel in the world around you. If you don't know what I'm talking about, then don't try to comprehend any of what I just said. You just won't get it.
MVP732 will get along just fine with or without any critique from me.