FrankRabbit
03-29-2004, 05:06 AM
I've got the basic structure of a short story to be adapted to film. But It's a fair bit rough around the edges and lacks the detail I desire. A basic summary is as follows: Two brothers (the only characters in the entire film/short story) are playing baseball one cloud streaked afternoon when the oldest brother (whom shall remain un-named) knocks the ball into the woods and orders the younger brother to find it. The younger brother is an insomniac whose sleep deprivation at the young age of seven has caused him to have vivid daytime hallucinations of both the auditory and visual persuasion. Once so far into the brush that his brother's eyes can't seek him, the youngest brother begins to see an odd man (hallucination) The man is cloaked in dark garb and very tall (thinking seven feet here) The man has a very nosferatu style with an exagerated nose (very long) and a top hat etc. Anyways he see's this man many times through the next few days and his sleep deprivation worsens. Then one night the man calls to the boy from his closet. The door swings open to reveal the boy's brother. But the younger brother see's his brother as the man and stabs him to death. (...) yeah that's all I got and like I said the concept is still very vague and I haven't pulled my thoughts together just yet. Tell me what you think/ improvements/ criticism. I realize it's not that great but I think I could easily mold it inot something quite pleasent.