HDC : Corpse in Orbit

[ferretchucker]

Well, I said that you might all get a Christmas treat, so here it is...late.

Most of you should hopefully remember my HDC: Darkness and Daggers Series, which will be returning in September. I have decided that due to the demand of D and D's fans, I will give in, and write you a little treat, but not quite the same. D and D was set in the past, in a world of dragons and magic, but what about the opposite side of the dice? The world of the future...

If there is enough interest in this, it will go ahead. A series starring the Horror.com community, set in the future, up in space. So, if you'd like to be included, please just post a comment, with a rough outline of what you would like your character will be like personality wise.

So...any takers?

[hammerfan]

*raises hand* Me, me!! I always pictured myself as a Ripley-type character. Tough on the outside, but with a soft center.

[_____V_____]

Sounds very interesting. Count me in.

A smartass marine who saves all but doesnt live to rejoice with the survivors in the end. Pretty similar to this guy...

http://i248.photobucket.com/albums/gg197/BubblesY2K2003/Hicks-BadAss.jpg


:cool:

[Dante'sInferno]

I want my characters name to be, Dante. I just want him to be behind the scenes with occasional appearences. With his motives masked and non-specified.

[newb]

I'll take a part........give me something along the lines of this guy

http://gfx1.gamelink.com/GLImages/addimages/john_holmes.jpg

maybe I can find Hammer's "soft center"
:D

[Doc Faustus]

Can I be an interplanetary missionary who gets advise from a mysterious extraterrestrial "god" but is bound by mortal frailties and emotions which sometimes counteract the deity's agendas?

[Dante'sInferno]

Can I be an interplanetary missionary who gets advise from a mysterious extraterrestrial "god" but is bound by mortal frailties and emotions which sometimes counteract the deity's agendas?

You kick ass. :)

[ferretchucker]

All of you will surely be included. I should hopefully have the first part up tonight.

But first, MORE CHARACTERS NEEDED!

[Doc Faustus]

You kick ass. :)

I try. Especially when somebody steals my goldfish crackers.

[Dante'sInferno]

I try. Especially when somebody steals my goldfish crackers.

Oh! Can I have a mildly retarded sidekick that has a cybernetic implant, so , after every sentence he says " Cake " and "Hard Nipples" ? Oh I want his name to be Spanky.



I can understand if you won't be able to that. Well atleast I tried.

[Dante'sInferno]

I try. Especially when somebody steals my goldfish crackers.


..............:D

[hammerfan]

Oooohhhhhh, I like it!!

[newb]

Oooohhhhhh, I like it!!

I don't.


Nothing about newb and his enormous schwanzstucker with his bevy of woman.:mad:

[ferretchucker]

I don't.


Nothing about newb and his enormous schwanzstucker with his bevy of woman.:mad:

Now, now, there will be Newb.

[hammerfan]

I don't.


Nothing about newb and his enormous schwanzstucker with his bevy of woman.:mad:


Damn, impatient dirty old devil, aren't you? :p

[Dante'sInferno]

Here goes!

http://i130.photobucket.com/albums/p255/ferretchucker/gabe.jpg

Opening credits role. Cut to a shot of New York. A voice over speaks.

Voice Over: In the year 2010, the human race prepared themselves for the greatest catastrophe in the history of the planet. For decades, a secret war had been going on between many countries. Each one knew how it would end, and they all prepared for it...

Suddenly, the image lights up, and a huge mushroom cloud shoots into the sky, turning it blood red. Cut to a shot of space, with several space stations in sight.

Voice Over: Thirty five space stations were sent up into the air, each one taking three hundred and fifty humans. One space station was for Japan, one for France, eight for China, one for England, one for Germany, one for Australia, eleven for America, two for Canada, seven for Russia and two were to preserve as many animals as possible.

The screen fades to black. Fade back in to the same shot, only the space stations look slightly different. More high tech, but dirtier.

Voice Over: Two hundred and thirty seven years later, in 2247, the human race has continued to survive on their space stations. They now live by recycling. Clothes are made from old clothes, machines are made from old machines and food is made from...old food. Of course, as time went by, people moved stations and each one is now very multi cultural. The German station has a large Japanese community on it.
It is ironically the Chinese ship that has the least amount of people left, at two hundred and three. The Canadian ships have the most with six hundred and one, and six hundred and twenty one. But it was none of these ships that faced the horrors that were to come...oh no. It all started on one of the American stations...

Fade to a shot of a space station. It appears to have been added to over the years giving it an odd appearance, like several toys that have broken and stuck together randomly by a child with glue. Fade to a control room. Only three people are in there, two at computers. A young man is at one computer.

Ferretchucker: Captain, I think you should take a look at this.

A taller, slightly older man walks over. He is wearing clothing that looks like an army uniform. He squints at the screen. It's a black image, with a few orange dots, obviously stars, and a large blue fraction of a circle; Earth. But in between Earth and the ship, is a strange haze, fluctuating between green and purple.

Dante: Hmmm. It doesn't look harmful...in fact, the computer seems to be drawn to it. Look at the Tantometer, it's nearly off the scale.

Ferretchucker: What could it be? I've never seen anything like it.

Dante: Neither have I...what's the nearest ship?

The woman on the other computer speaks up.

Hammerfan: AM05. I'm trying to get in contact with them now sir.

She taps at a keyboard under the desk.

Hammerfan: What the fu-

The screen in front of her smashes open, sparks flying everywhere. Ferretchucker's does the same thing.

Dante: What's going on here?

Ferretchucker: I don't know! Hammer, pull the EmCord.

She runs over to a handle on the wall with "Emergency" written on it. She pulls on it and it comes out of the wall, on a wire. Cut to a shot of the outside of the space station. A large radar dish turns, and lights round the edges start flashing. Suddenly, the dish starts rusting. Within seconds it's completely orange, and after a few more it breaks off.

Dante: Help should be on the way soon...

Hammerfan: Should we keep the shield down? The sun's behind Earth, so we should be okay.

Dante: I think so, yes. Whatever this thing is...it's dangerous.

Suddenly, without warning, the large metal shields start rising revealing the glass behind them.

Dante: Who's doing that? Ferretchucker?

Ferretchucker: Not me Sir! It's doing it on it's own! I can't stop it. The EmCord was pulled, it should be able to do that!

Dante: What are we going to do?

Hammerfan: I think I can keep up the UV shield!

She begins turning some dials and pressing buttons.

Hammerfan: FERRET! See if you can keep the power from fluctuating using the manual lever!

Ferretchucker runs to a large lever and pulls it to halfway. He begins struggling with it. Suddenly, he screams and lets go.

Dante: WHAT?!

Ferretchucker: It's red hot sir! I need some water! Quick! AHHHHH!

The skin on his hands is red and blistered. The lever he was pulling goes straight forward. Hammerfan jumps back.

Dante: What is it?

Hammerfan: The power! It's too high! If I touched that I'd be burned to a crisp! How is it still working?!

The dials begin moving and buttons pressing of their own accord. The shield is now full up. Nothing can be seen. Earth is there, but where the screen said the light was, there is nothing. Suddenly, the outer layer of glass begins rising.

Dante: SHIT! The Solar shield!

As the shield rises, now a bright light shines through.

Ferretchucker: Not just that sir...every shield on the ship.

Cut to an outer shot of the ship, with a bright white light shining on it. Cut to several shots of people staring in awe at the light. Several people suddenly collapse, including a man who was walking a corridor with a woman. Se begins screaming.

Woman: V! V!

Cut back to the control room. Dante stares at the light.

Hammerfan: Sir, Ferret! Get under the desks!

Ferret and Hammerfan dive down. Dante stares at the light. Cut to a close shot of Dante's eyes. The light is reflecting in them, and what looks like a strand of DNA is revolving in his pupils.

Hammerfan: DANTE!

Dante: Secundum.

Dante falls to the floor, unconscious. Ferret and Hammerfan crawl over to each other.

Ferretchucker: What do we do?!

The lights flicker, than turn off. They're plunged into darkness. Hammerfan's voice sounds.

Hammerfan: We pray...

Cut to an outer shot of the space station, now with no power. The light slowly dims, then fades. The space station is left, floating in the dim light that's left. Ending credits role.

Everytime you post one of these, i feel like a kid again. I can't wait untill you release a book, if that's what you choose to do. I'd buy it immediately. Genius

[ferretchucker]

Thanks for your support, it means a lot to me.

[Papillon Noir]

Yay! You're doing another story, Ferret! :) I really like the new premise. Can I be an anti-hero this time? Like a former criminal who learns to use her skills for good? ...with purple hair. :D

[ferretchucker]

Kinda like a purple hir version of this girlie then?

http://i130.photobucket.com/albums/p255/ferretchucker/ferretchuckerVillain38.jpg

[monalisa]

Yay! I was hoping there'd be another one of these stories. I love this!!!!

I wanna be a gunsmith/weapons maker. I want to be honest but dreadfully sarcastic with a "don't fuck with me" attitude/reputation. My shop to be guarded by Solo, the dreaded white fluffy Planet Terror type gun-paw dog of the future.

[GorePhobia]

You can throw me in there as well if you'd like.

[Papillon Noir]

Kinda like a purple hir version of this girlie then?

http://i130.photobucket.com/albums/p255/ferretchucker/ferretchuckerVillain38.jpg

You got it. ;)

[roshiq]

like to be a part of it as a part man-part machine....part good-part evil type inter galactic fighter.:)

[ferretchucker]

Yes, all of you will be included. I might do another part tonight.

[Dante'sInferno]

Can't wait to see what happens next!

[newb]

Good job.....you've really captured the essence of "newb".


though 6 girls would have been more realistic :D

[hammerfan]

Awesome, FC! You have me riveted!!

[newb]

Awesome, FC! You have me riveted!!

I thought that was my job :D

[roshiq]

Wow! Sounds like a true sci-fi epic! Please Continue...:)

[Papillon Noir]

Wow! Great start Ferret! Can't wait until the next episode! :D

[ferretchucker]

Thanks everyone! I probably won't be able to do an episode tonight, but I will tomorrow. A lot more characters should be added, but I still need more willing participation!!! I had to use Chronogrl without her permission, which I hope she doesn't mind.

[bloody_ribcut]

why not.....

[The Flayed One]

If it's not too late to jump in, I'll be a once famous space pirate who's turned into a drunk because he believe the trade has lost its purity.

[CryptKeeper13]

Can I be the asshole that everyone hates and then dies horrifically?

[bloody_ribcut]

why not.....

i'll be the space pothead..

[Dante'sInferno]

i'll be the space pothead..
.............:D

[ferretchucker]

i'll be the space pothead..

I said describe what your character will be like, not what you're already like! :D

[Freak]

That was awesome dude.Can't wait for the next part.

[ChronoGrl]

OH - What will happen to Chrono?! :eek:

Lots of fun, Gabe!

[Dante'sInferno]

Get's better and better! :D

[Papillon Noir]

Creepy! That was amazing, can't wait for the next part! :D

[newb]

Good work son........my character is a bit of a prick....make sure you kill me off creatively. ;)

[ferretchucker]

Thanks everyone. Next part should be up tonight.

And Newb, I'll do you proud!

[hammerfan]

Gabe, I think this is your best work yet!

[ChronoGrl]

NICE!

I like it when episodes end with focus on me. :D

[ferretchucker]

Yes, Chronogrl, you got the last word this time.

In tonights episode I'm hoping to introduce Doc Faustus, Monalisa, Butterfly, Roshiq and develop V.

[roshiq]

Yes, Chronogrl, you got the last word this time.

In tonights episode I'm hoping to introduce Doc Faustus, Monalisa, Butterfly, Roshiq and develop V.

Can't wait!:)

[Dante'sInferno]

Great! :D .......

[bloody_ribcut]

mom would be so proud, i had a speaking role.

[monalisa]

*sqeals with delight* (er, sorry about that)

Woo-hoo! Love it! It's so much fun to see what you do with everyone's characters (especially mine) :D . Interesting storyline too. Once again, great job Ferret!!!

[massacre man]

Damn. Already got raped.

[Papillon Noir]

Looking good so far! :)

[roshiq]

In the corner is a man, except his fingers end with sharp metal claws, sticking through the skin. He's missing an eye, with a camera lens crudely put in there. Most of his hair is gone, and bits of rusty metal are visible under bits of torn skin


Bit horrifying...but I like this look!:cool:

[Papillon Noir]

Woohoo! I have arrived! :D

[monalisa]

Opening credits role. Fade to a shot of the front door of Monalisa's shop, with the large hole. Fade into it.



OK, for the record, the door to my "shop" does not have a large hole. :p Sorry ferret, it had to be said. :D I know, I'm being a perv again.

ANYWAY, another fine chapter to the story. I'm so glad you do this, you're so good at it, and it's so fun to read!

[ferretchucker]

No replies at all? :(

[roshiq]

Carry on, FC!:)

[Papillon Noir]

Carry on, FC!:)

Yeah, it's great! I'm interested to see what happens (especially to my character ;) ) next! :)

[The Flayed One]

Yeah, it's great! I'm interested to see what happens (especially to my character ;) ) next! :)

Very nice. It's you and me baby!;)

[monalisa]

I'm sorry master ferret *bows humbly* I've had the week from hell at work and this is the first time I had time to read this again. Once again, well done. Please continue! :) :) :)

[hammerfan]

Sorry, FC! I get so wrapped up in the story I forget to comment! It's awesome! Can't wait for more!

[Dante'sInferno]

Heh, pretty cool episode, Roshiq is pretty cool. :D

[hammerfan]

Nice! Can't wait for the next installment!

[Doc Faustus]

Good work. Have you looked into competitions for young genre writers?

[ferretchucker]

I haven't. At the moment I just write recreationally. Would you recommend it?

[Dante'sInferno]

That sounds like a good idea Ferret. But, good work, like always!

[monalisa]

I know I sound like a broken record, but I don't know what else to say except that your stories are so fun to read. Keep up the good work! :)

[ferretchucker]

I know I sound like a broken record, but I don't know what else to say except that your stories are so fun to read. Keep up the good work! :)

No you don't! I love the praise you lot give me!

[newb]

Keep up the good work Ferret. You have a very good imagination.

[Doc Faustus]

I haven't. At the moment I just write recreationally. Would you recommend it?

I wouldn't recommend being a professional writer to anybody who wouldn't give it their all. As a way to earn a living, it's on par with collecting empty soda bottles. But, if you want to put in the time and the energy, which the time and energy you put into these posts seems to indicate, you'll do fine. Make sure to have a dayjob, though, because it can be very rough going for awhile. I think looking into competitions for young writers (particularly genre oriented ones) will help you get serious and learn about the craft early, which I always recommend for people who are interested. People who pull writing out of their ass as a profession after college really annoy me. People who think writing is an easy way to make money and get famous annoy me more. Writing is only as easy a way to make money and get famous as becoming an actor, musician or director.

[ferretchucker]

I think I'll look into that then.

How long did it take you to get your literary pieces noticed?

[Doc Faustus]

Eight years.

[roshiq]

Heh, pretty cool episode, Roshiq is pretty cool.

yeah..I'm!:D ;)

[ferretchucker]

Eight years.

Wow! Is it paying off now?

[Doc Faustus]

Gradually. My book JUST came out in July. It's sold about forty copies without any ad space used and print reviews are coming soon. I find it less difficult to sell stories now and I have good connections. I'm actually reading subs for somebody now. Early novels are a calling card and I feel I have a pretty good one. Unless you've found a very subtly different spin on the sexy vampire novel or the zombie apocalypse, you can't expect the agent and the million in the bank for your first book and if you can't write that stuff, you can't write it. No sense forcing it. I tried to force out a commercial novel and ended up getting passionate and writing the book that's gotten me labeled a Bizarro writer. I went in expecting the million for a first novel (the one before this) that was a Joycean/Cronenberg exploration of Hell. Wrote it for seven years. Use your time better than that and you'll be okay, or better yet, don't and learn from it.

[The Flayed One]

Gradually. My book JUST came out in July. It's sold about forty copies without any ad space used and print reviews are coming soon. I find it less difficult to sell stories now and I have good connections. I'm actually reading subs for somebody now. Early novels are a calling card and I feel I have a pretty good one. Unless you've found a very subtly different spin on the sexy vampire novel or the zombie apocalypse, you can't expect the agent and the million in the bank for your first book and if you can't write that stuff, you can't write it. No sense forcing it. I tried to force out a commercial novel and ended up getting passionate and writing the book that's gotten me labeled a Bizarro writer. I went in expecting the million for a first novel (the one before this) that was a Joycean/Cronenberg exploration of Hell. Wrote it for seven years. Use your time better than that and you'll be okay, or better yet, don't and learn from it.

hey doc fustus I wrote a vampir story and i think its good and i want u to read it and tell me if you think i could publish it if so pm me omg i could be famous lol!!!!1

[Doc Faustus]

hey doc fustus I wrote a vampir story and i think its good and i want u to read it and tell me if you think i could publish it if so pm me omg i could be famous lol!!!!1

I'll publish it for you. For a mere $400 reading fee, I'll publish it through Booksurge (one of the biggest small presses in America!) and give you a 3% royalty (industry standard of course). You will have to provide your own coverart however.

[ferretchucker]

Feedback????

[roshiq]

waiting for the next episode...great going, FC!

[Dante'sInferno]

Pretty awesome Ferret

[monalisa]

Sorry, work has been hell, haven't had time for anything else.

Great work again ferret, except, (I hate even saying this) but, onions, layers and orges? Come on man that's right out of Shrek. :)

[ferretchucker]

I've never even heard of...what was it? Shrak? :D

[monalisa]

I've never even heard of...what was it? Shrak? :D

Damn kiddo, you are so far beyond cool. (God I sound old saying that phrase.) You actually get it. :D

[ferretchucker]

Hehe, Thanks. Anyone else got anything to say about the episode? I know you're reading it! I can see the amount of views this thread is getting.

[ferretchucker]

Any feedback?

[scouse mac]

Im really enjoying it, keep those creative juices flowing

[Dante'sInferno]

Im really enjoying it, keep those creative juices flowing

I agree. It's great so far.

[Papillon Noir]

I've been busy and finally caught up on this. It's going great so far, Ferret! Can't wait for the next episode. :)

[newb]

Any feedback?

Fine job son.


but newb would NEVER smoke.

[ferretchucker]

Newb would never manage to get 6 bikini girls in his bed either! Oooooh, sick burn!

I'm about to start work on another episode guys.

[Papillon Noir]

Oh! How intriguing! Can't wait for the next one, Ferret! :)

[ferretchucker]

Thanks Butterfly.


Come on, the rest of you readers! Let's have some more feedback!

[Doc Faustus]

Characters are emerging and that's good. If you keep going in this direction, you'll do well. Just keep remembering that plot should be influenced by character and not vice versa and you'll be fine. Life doesn't yank you down the street to the store, you get hungry and decide to go.

[ferretchucker]

Characters are emerging and that's good. If you keep going in this direction, you'll do well. Just keep remembering that plot should be influenced by character and not vice versa and you'll be fine. Life doesn't yank you down the street to the store, you get hungry and decide to go.

Thanks for the advice, bud. And glad you're enjoying it.

[ferretchucker]

I was planning to write an episode today but I just finished writing an essay for school and I really don't feel like writing anymore. Hopefully I'll have on up tomorrow.

[Dante'sInferno]

Good episode ferret. I hope you feel better soon.

[ferretchucker]

Thanks for the feedback an the good thoughts, Dante.

[Papillon Noir]

I like the character development there, Ferret. Get better soon...so you can write more! :p

[ferretchucker]

I'll do my best! :D

[ferretchucker]

Ferret to readers. Come in. Over.

[Papillon Noir]

Noir here. Awaiting next entry. Standing by. Over.



:p

[ferretchucker]

Okay, we are good to go. There should be an episode up sometime by tonight.

Over.

[Papillon Noir]

Loud and clear. Standing by. Over.

[Doc Faustus]

Really upped the ante on the intensity.

[Papillon Noir]

Really upped the ante on the intensity.

Yeah, I'm liking it Ferret. Interesting plot point on Doc and of course, loving the scenes with myself. :D

[newb]

Very nice.


but what the hell happened to me.......did Freak save me?


and why am I such a pussy? ;)

[ferretchucker]

@Doc - Good to hear you're enjoying it.

@ Butterfly - Thanks.

@Newb - Thankyou

You'll find out

If I had the real Newb, the creatures would be dead in

three minutes. :p

[newb]

@Doc - Good to hear you're enjoying it.

@ Butterfly - Thanks.

@Newb - Thankyou

You'll find out

If I had the real Newb, the creatures would be dead in

three minutes. :p

good answer ;)

[ferretchucker]

I thought so. :)

[Papillon Noir]

When's the next episode, Ferret? :)

[ferretchucker]

Hopefully tonight!

[hammerfan]

Wow, that was awesome!

[Papillon Noir]

Wow, that was awesome!

Agreed! Just amazing Ferret! I like where you are taking the story. :)

[Dante'sInferno]

Another GREAT episode!

[scouse mac]

Just amazing Ferret! I like where you are taking the story. :)

The progression of your story is excellent!

Keep up the good work Ferret

[ferretchucker]

Thanks ever so much guys, it means a lot to me!

[Doc Faustus]

Good work. Keep amping up the tension.

[hammerfan]

Excellent, FC!

[hammerfan]

Another awesome entry!

[hammerfan]

Could've sworn I commented on this episode. Another great entry, FC! When's the next one? Are you going to wait until BR II is over?

[Papillon Noir]

Could've sworn I commented on this episode. Another great entry, FC! When's the next one? Are you going to wait until BR II is over?

Agreed! This story is really moving along! :)

[Rayne]

WOW!...I finally got to read all of this and it's AMAZING!

Unfortunately, I'm already dead :p...Oh well, Dustin is dead, too so we'll just being doing it in hell...until we crawl back out and take revenge on Gore...Mwahahaha

Just kidding...I'll get him in his nightmares ;)


This truly is incredible Ferret, and I agree that you should try to get something published...I know it's difficult to get your foot in the door, but you're still young, if you start now you could really get somewhere by the time you're 20...I have tremendous faith in your abilities :)

[ferretchucker]

Thanks. Sorry about killing you and all, but I needed a plot device to move Gore forward.

And I really will start looking into publishing.

[Rayne]

Thanks. Sorry about killing you and all, but I needed a plot device to move Gore forward.

And I really will start looking into publishing.
Woo Hoo!...And I really will buy one of your books...I mean that sincerely

[monalisa]

Wow, I just finally got all caught up too. Holy crap! I'm having an alien birth! Really didn't see that coming. :eek: :D Keep it up Ferret, great story!

[crabapple]

Heh heh...it reads a little like an episode of Futurama!

[ferretchucker]

IS that a good or bad thing?

[scouse mac]

You've written some really good stuff here FC.

Its not easy to come up with something original like this so you should be pleased with what you've created.

[crabapple]

IS that a good or bad thing?

That it reads like an episode of Futurama? That's a GREAT thing.

[Papillon Noir]

This is really going awesome, Ferret! I can't wait to see what happens next! :)

[ferretchucker]

Thoughts, comrades?

[_____V_____]

Interesting so far.

[hammerfan]

Awesome, of course

[Papillon Noir]

Looking good, Ferret! I can't wait for the different parties to come together.

[ferretchucker]

Certain parties will meet, others won't, unfortunately.

Also, at this point I will say, if your character dies, it is nothing personal. Quite a few will die before the end. I've kept these people alive through many situations, and it would be unrealistic for them to come out virtually casualty free.

[Papillon Noir]

I will completely blame you of course if my character is at dinner and a creature comes out of her chest.





:p

[Doc Faustus]

Wow. Good work.

[ferretchucker]

Thanks. Apologies for your rather lack luster death, but I feel it served a purpose of showing that Secundum has lost a lot of power, and it also hindered the creatures making their way to another ship.

[ferretchucker]

Thoughts of the new part?

[hammerfan]

Excellent, of course!

[Papillon Noir]

I actually thought I had already posted. :eek:

Great death scene for Doc! Loved it.

The last episode was really good too, I was shocked how Roshiq took Mona and me out. Interesting interchange between Gore and Chrono. Really looking forward to the next one! :)

[Rayne]

It's so...creeepy...I love it :)

[ferretchucker]

I was shocked how Roshiq took Mona and me out. Interesting interchange between Gore and Chrono. Really looking forward to the next one! :)

That's what I was hoping for. I was trying to lull my readers into believing that there was hope for the last few people, but so far Doc Faustus, Massacre Man, Papillon Noir (you), Monalisa and Hammerfan have all died recently. Gorephobia is as good as dead and there will be more.

Glad to hear you're all enjoying it.

I also always try to kill myself in a really pitiful way.

[massacre man]

That's what I was hoping for. I was trying to lull my readers into believing that there was hope for the last few people, but so far Doc Faustus, Massacre Man, Papillon Noir (you), Monalisa and Hammerfan have all died recently. Gorephobia is as good as dead and there will be more.

Glad to hear you're all enjoying it.

I also always try to kill myself in a really pitiful way.

I'm not dead. I just went home to tend to my burn wounds and won't be in the rest of the story. That's how I'm going to interpret it anyway.

[ferretchucker]

I'm not dead. I just went home to tend to my burn wounds and won't be in the rest of the story. That's how I'm going to interpret it anyway.

:eek: How did you know the truth? :rolleyes: :p

[Doc Faustus]

I'm not dead. I just went home to tend to my burn wounds and won't be in the rest of the story. That's how I'm going to interpret it anyway.

INT: Space bathroom in space

Massacre Man: Ah, space icy hot, thank god you're sentient here in the future and understand that I only need to cool off.
Icy Hot: I love you...

[Papillon Noir]

Wow! That was pretty cool. Good episode. I liked the twist. The tattoo was clever. :)

[ferretchucker]

Wow! That was pretty cool. Good episode. I liked the twist. The tattoo was clever. :)

Thanks.

For a long time I was thinking about who Freak would be. Dante had obviously realized because he mentioned it. He's seen it right away. I was considering it to be V's girlfriend who was seen with him in the very first episode, but I thought that would be unfair on Freak. Then I considered maybe an ex captain of the ship, but having it as a previously unmentioned character might be a let down. So, I went for him and V actually being each other.

[scouse mac]

Really impressive job, Ferret! I enjoyed reading that.


It would be good if one of the mods can move just the story posts together and have it in the horror fiction section. You should be proud of yourself over this.

:)

[ferretchucker]

Thanks. In case you're interested, I did another one last year set back in medieval times called HDC: Darkness and Daggers. http://www.horror.com/forum/showthread.php?t=35336

And it'd be cool if a mod did that.

[The Flayed One]

It would honestly be easier for ferret to open a new thread, and just cut and paste entries.

[ferretchucker]

It would honestly be easier for ferret to open a new thread, and just cut and paste entries.

But I'm lazy! :p

And what did you think of it? You were probably the only one who had a real happy ending and you were a dick in it.

[roseyred]

a very good read man!

[ferretchucker]

Thanks. To begin with I wondered how I would stretch it out to at least 30 episodes but by the end I almost had to cut it down!

[The Flayed One]

But I'm lazy! :p

And what did you think of it? You were probably the only one who had a real happy ending and you were a dick in it.

I really enjoyed it. I thought it was great that one of the biggest jerks in the story made it out home free.

As far as the thread, I'll see what I can do.

[The Flayed One]

Nevermind. We had two mods working on it at once, apparently :D

[_____V_____]

http://horror.com/forum/showthread.php?t=50855

Edited some posts to remove some out-of-story stuff.

[ferretchucker]

that's cool. Just glad to see it's gone for good! I was worried there.

Oh, and sorry for killing you off and all V.

[_____V_____]

A very fitting end to a great story, Ferret. I liked it.

Keep up the good work, kid.

[_____V_____]

btw, I rated it 4 stars out of 5.

[ferretchucker]

Thanks for all the feedback! But what about my other faithful readers? Monalisa, Hammerfan, Dante, Papillon Noir, Doc Faustus?

Just so I'm sure you all know, you can find the entire HDC: Corpse in Orbit HERE (http://www.horror.com/forum/showthread.php?t=50855).

[ferretchucker]

For those who were wondering...

***tumbleweed***

This is how I pictured the Lux Lucis roughly. There were certain things on here I couldn't get right. Picture it crouched a lot more and with longer claws as well as thinner.

http://i130.photobucket.com/albums/p255/ferretchucker/LuxLucis.jpg

[Papillon Noir]

Thanks for all the feedback! But what about my other faithful readers? Monalisa, Hammerfan, Dante, Papillon Noir, Doc Faustus?

Just so I'm sure you all know, you can find the entire HDC: Corpse in Orbit HERE (http://www.horror.com/forum/showthread.php?t=50855).

I responded to the last episode (though I wasn't sure that that was very end at the time), but it was very enjoyable! Great story! I think you're writing is getting better all the time and you are wonderfully creative. I am interested to see what genre you will be tackling next! :)

[ferretchucker]

Just happy to know you saw the conclusion! :)

[Doc Faustus]

Excellent ending. A lot of surprises, not many genre cliches. Good work, especially for your age. You should join up with a solid online writing group.

[ferretchucker]

Thanks. Good to know I have the approval of a real writer! :)

What kind of writing group do you mean? Do you know any good ones?

[Doc Faustus]

I don't know if Critters admits underage people, but Critters is famous for being a school of hardknocks. But I couldn't do it, too much reading genre work. I can't read and critique several fantasy stories a month. Zoetrope Virtual Studio is also good. You've gotta read things there, too, but the writers know what they're talking about and won't look at you as a kid, but as a writer who needs work. If your ego can't take a bruise, steer clear of these guys. If you want an occasionally useful snugglefest, go to Writer's Cafe, but it's advice will only take you so far. What you should, however read:
On Writing Horror by the Horror Writer's Association
On Writing by Stephen King
The Art of Fiction by John Gardner (only because of your age and be careful with the exercises. They might make you want to douse the book and yourself in kerosene.)
Zen in the Art of Writing by Ray Bradbury. Because Ray is one of the best there is was and will be. Anybody who tells you Ray Bradbury sucks should be faxed to Baghdad.
Murderland Part 1: H8 by Garrett Cook...how did that get there? Ummm....
NINJA SMOKEBOMB!
*cough cough*
I'm back.
The Great Gatsby by F. Scott Fitzgerald. It's what writing looks like.
It by Stephen King
Boy's Life by Robert R. Mc Cammon
Collected Stories of Franz Kafka (for the art of extended metaphor)
Heart of Darkness by Joesph Conrad

[ferretchucker]

Very informative. I'll be interested to see how tough the critique is of Zoetrope virtual studio.