ferretchucker
10-14-2007, 08:41 AM
Well, after my recent "Rhyme Off" with marley's ghost, I thought of this. The idea is just that we write a poem or post one of our favourites. Here's one I wrote.
Creature of the Moon
I sit alone in my cold hut,
waiting for daylight to come,
the inner monster inside me yearns for blood,
raging and banging my head like a drum,
The dark blue sky fades to pink,
and I feel my control return,
But as I look around myself,
My heart begins to burn,
An old man, of about 60 years old,
with gaping hole in his chest,
a pool of blood fills it up,
and stains his torn up vest
Nothing else, but it was enough,
Something must be done,
I grab my coat and put on my boots,
then I begin to run,
I run for miles, I do not tire,
not since that fateful day,
I remember it well, but try to forget,
But in mind it will always lay,
The town appears and I press on,
I know exactly where to go,
To the old man with the cat in the Graveyard cottage,
I just hope he doesn't say no,
I bang on the door,
"Open Up" I shout and I hear a noise inside,
The door opens and the old man nods,
He looks like he's already died,
"You have the curse, that is clear,"
he says in a rasping voice,
"But what do you want?" he asks me now,
"Because there is only one choice."
"I think I know, but I'm not too sure"
I'm almost too scared to listen,
He draws an object from his pocket,
it has an amazing glisten,
"This bullet will cure you that is certain,
but it has a terrible price."
"I'm willing to die" I answer him,
"I've already killed twice"
He gives me the bullet and off I go,
to fulfill my terrible fate,
I arrive back at my forest hut,
But I fear I am too late,
I've had too much time to think about it all,
and do not wish to die,
I know I can fight it, yes I can!
To say I couldn't would be a lie,
So I throw away the bullet and lay down,
Twenty days will be over soon,
then my other side will re-appear,
the creature of the moon.
Opinions?
Creature of the Moon
I sit alone in my cold hut,
waiting for daylight to come,
the inner monster inside me yearns for blood,
raging and banging my head like a drum,
The dark blue sky fades to pink,
and I feel my control return,
But as I look around myself,
My heart begins to burn,
An old man, of about 60 years old,
with gaping hole in his chest,
a pool of blood fills it up,
and stains his torn up vest
Nothing else, but it was enough,
Something must be done,
I grab my coat and put on my boots,
then I begin to run,
I run for miles, I do not tire,
not since that fateful day,
I remember it well, but try to forget,
But in mind it will always lay,
The town appears and I press on,
I know exactly where to go,
To the old man with the cat in the Graveyard cottage,
I just hope he doesn't say no,
I bang on the door,
"Open Up" I shout and I hear a noise inside,
The door opens and the old man nods,
He looks like he's already died,
"You have the curse, that is clear,"
he says in a rasping voice,
"But what do you want?" he asks me now,
"Because there is only one choice."
"I think I know, but I'm not too sure"
I'm almost too scared to listen,
He draws an object from his pocket,
it has an amazing glisten,
"This bullet will cure you that is certain,
but it has a terrible price."
"I'm willing to die" I answer him,
"I've already killed twice"
He gives me the bullet and off I go,
to fulfill my terrible fate,
I arrive back at my forest hut,
But I fear I am too late,
I've had too much time to think about it all,
and do not wish to die,
I know I can fight it, yes I can!
To say I couldn't would be a lie,
So I throw away the bullet and lay down,
Twenty days will be over soon,
then my other side will re-appear,
the creature of the moon.
Opinions?