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Vodstok
11-08-2006, 05:54 AM
But NO ONE ever goes to the horror writers forum...
I cant be the only attention whore in here that is dying to get feedback on what they wrote, so get your asses in there and comment!
See? here's a link:
http://horror.com/forum/forumdisplay.php?f=30
you dont even have to hit your "back" button. Take your time reading, I can wait....
Vodstok
11-08-2006, 07:05 AM
No replies, eh?
*Gives harsh look....*
stygianwitch
11-08-2006, 07:19 AM
No replies, eh?
*Gives harsh look....*
hope you're not glaring at me, i already posted down there ;)
Vodstok
11-08-2006, 07:24 AM
Nope, not to you at all :)
I suppose i should have specified that this was for those people who havent been there yet :D
You are one of the good ones :D
crabapple
11-08-2006, 07:27 AM
me 2! I read it too
Haunted
11-08-2006, 08:18 AM
Very interesting story, Vod. You're right, it could use some work, but not in the sense of changing everything. I think you need to draw it out more. It needs more... meat. A little background on this particular area would be nice. Maybe develope a local legend, and play it in Glenn's head as he walks through. Connect the dots with the clues; I mean, okay, he finds them. I'd rather you give circumstances under which he finds them. That way you can build a lot more suspense and fear, not only in Glenn, but in your audience.
The two things that I think you should consider changing are:
1. The guy who hired Glenn... Maybe Glenn should be the Native American, because there are very few wealthy Native Americans in this country. I know this because part of my heritage is Native American.
2. I wouldn't give Glenn the job of PI. PI's generally don't do that kind of work. Maybe he's a hunter or even a bounty hunter with a noble reputation. Perhaps he's got a degree in biology with a healthy hobby in cryptozoology. Maybe the idea of monsters in the woods has always fascinated him.
Since who or whatever is there seems to know and/or like Glenn, maybe it senses his fascination and takes it as a sign of respect and awe.
Vodstok
11-08-2006, 08:21 AM
Very interesting story, Vod. You're right, it could use some work, but not in the sense of changing everything. I think you need to draw it out more. It needs more... meat. A little background on this particular area would be nice. Maybe develope a local legend, and play it in Glenn's head as he walks through. Connect the dots with the clues; I mean, okay, he finds them. I'd rather you give circumstances under which he finds them. That way you can build a lot more suspense and fear, not only in Glenn, but in your audience.
The two things that I think you should consider changing are:
1. The guy who hired Glenn... Maybe Glenn should be the Native American, because there are very few wealthy Native Americans in this country. I know this because part of my heritage is Native American.
2. I wouldn't give Glenn the job of PI. PI's generally don't do that kind of work. Maybe he's a hunter or even a bounty hunter with a noble reputation. Perhaps he's got a degree in biology with a healthy hobby in cryptozoology. Maybe the idea of monsters in the woods has always fascinated him.
Since who or whatever is there seems to know and/or like Glenn, maybe it senses his fascination and takes it as a sign of respect and awe.
Nice.... i think all of those would be huge improvements... I think the research i had done for this story amounted to looking up in an atlas to see if the rockies did go up into canada. I dont think i had an internet connection for about 4 years after i wrote it :)
But NO ONE ever goes to the horror writers forum...
I cant be the only attention whore in here that is dying to get feedback on what they wrote, so get your asses in there and comment!
See? here's a link:
http://horror.com/forum/forumdisplay.php?f=30
you dont even have to hit your "back" button. Take your time reading, I can wait....
but I do
*sniff, sniff http://i108.photobucket.com/albums/n22/mule4468/emos/352.gif "no body like me" sniff, sniff *
Vodstok
11-08-2006, 08:42 AM
but I do
*sniff, sniff http://i108.photobucket.com/albums/n22/mule4468/emos/352.gif "no body like me" sniff, sniff *
Nope, not to you at all :)
I suppose i should have specified that this was for those people who havent been there yet :D
You are one of the good ones :D
Damn 10 character rule......
Vodstok
11-08-2006, 09:52 AM
all these people viewing
stubbornforgey
11-08-2006, 09:54 AM
But NO ONE ever goes to the horror writers forum...
I cant be the only attention whore in here that is dying to get feedback on what they wrote, so get your asses in there and comment!
See? here's a link:
http://horror.com/forum/forumdisplay.php?f=30
you dont even have to hit your "back" button. Take your time reading, I can wait....
OMG...
did you get some this morning???
the nice ness..'shivers'..
scary :o
Vodstok
11-08-2006, 11:01 AM
OMG...
did you get some this morning???
If you mean "Coffee", then yes :p
Despare
11-08-2006, 03:39 PM
"Writing's for nerds!"
;)
ok - so people read your stories - are you happy now???
http://i134.photobucket.com/albums/q108/zerohdc/15716.jpg
Despare
11-08-2006, 04:50 PM
I'll have to read more when I have time but the spousal abuse story was the cat's pajamas.
Vodstok
11-09-2006, 07:50 AM
I'll have to read more when I have time but the spousal abuse story was the cat's pajamas.
I hope it was the end you liked and not the beginning...
:)
Despare
11-09-2006, 12:19 PM
I hope it was the end you liked and not the beginning...
:)
Both, but for different reasons.