Because I am impatient

[Vodstok]

I know everyone else posts in the horror fiction section then waits aptiently for feedback, but everyone knows i never wait more than an hour or so before i start getting antsy and post it up here, so I'm posting it up here:
From the Well

I have been reading a LOT of Lovecraft lately. Plus, I want to hear what peopel think about the end: specifically, what happened. I know what happened, its not completely open (to me, anyway), but I want to know what everyone else makes of it.

[Vodstok]

*cough*
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Ahem....

(taps foot impatiently)

[Porcupiney]

Read it folks, or the porcupines will bring the pain.



THE PAIN.

[hammerfan]

Excellent, of course, Vod. I ALWAYS enjoy your stories.

[Papillon Noir]

I think it's an interesting story, though I don't like the idea of the recorder. I can't imagine the captor allowing him to record all this especially when the monster makes his appearance.

Also, why are they going to all the trouble of the pig if they are just going to feed it the captive? And why feed it at all? For fun or is it some creature that pray to?

[Vodstok]

Originally Posted by hammerfan

Excellent, of course, Vod. I ALWAYS enjoy your stories.

Thank you

Originally Posted by Papillon Noir

I think it's an interesting story, though I don't like the idea of the recorder. I can't imagine the captor allowing him to record all this especially when the monster makes his appearance.

Also, why are they going to all the trouble of the pig if they are just going to feed it the captive? And why feed it at all? For fun or is it some creature that pray to?

the joy of first person. what do you think?


The captor didn't allow anything, he didn't know about the recorder.

[Papillon Noir]

Originally Posted by Vodstok

the joy of first person. what do you think?

I think just doing it for fun is kind of lame. Personally, I think having some sort of tentacle monster cult is much more interesting

You could have someone find the recorder in part 2 and reveal more about the secretive tentatcle monster cult.

[Vodstok]

The last word of the story makes it a little unlikely that anyone would be finding the recorder any time soon

[Papillon Noir]

Originally Posted by Vodstok

The last word of the story makes it a little unlikely that anyone would be finding the recorder any time soon

Hey, you never know. You're the author, you can do whatever you want. I still think Part 2: Secret of the Tentacle Monster Cult would be cool.

[La Chat Noire]

I thought it was good. I always like the style of first person narratives. I think you should extend it though and make a longer story.