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I haven't been working on it much lately, been focusing on the kids poems and the latest screenplay. I'll get back on track with it later next month.
thanks for the kind words, they are appreciated:D
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good call, that's exactly how I pitched it. Cops find the murder scene - play the tape - go mad themselves and begin attacking one another:eek:
family fun.
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Probably going to be a short story. 20 pages or so.
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Smarten up the character a bit. Surprise people. The character's good for film, but for print, you need to add some more traits the reader isn't expecting. The writing's crisp, sharp, intelligent, but the character needs something to distinguish him from other old rocker archetypes.
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Excellent writing--quite polished for a first draft, if that's what it is.
I definitely got a great sense of the character. I was surprised when I learned he was only 37. I felt he was much older than that, and maybe that is what you intended--I think it is. Might be a bit stereotypical (aged rock star, feeling lonely, used, spent), but it seems to be working so far. Good luck on finishing it up! |
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Now I just need the time and motivation to complete it - too many other deadlines!:eek:
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