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Old 05-01-2009, 07:59 PM
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CHAPTER 1

FADE IN:

INT. BLAKE CITY, CERBERUS COMICS - NIGHT

An empty comic book store, the only inhabitant, WAYNE LUCAS, sits behind the counter with a bored expression on his face. He is wearing blue jeans, a red T-shirt. A stack of comic books rest by his elbow, one open in front of him. But this doesn't have his attention, the television does. He's watching the news, speaking of the power outage in Twilight City.

REPORTER (On Television)
The power remains out throughout all of Twilight City, despite the best efforts of the electrical companies. How long will this city be left in the dark?

Wayne watches this and vanishes from behind the counter.

EXT. BLAKE CITY, CERBERUS COMICS - NIGHT

The door to Cerberus Comics slams shut as if somebody had just left but nobody is in sight, the sign in the door has been switched to "CLOSED"

EXT. TWILIGHT CITY, SHOPPING DISTRICT - NIGHT

The city is still cloaked in darkness, with only the light from the full moon to guide it's citizens who have chosen to remain outside. The shopping district, however, is empty. Until several small headlights shine into the store windows. Three men on motorcycles illuminate the insides of the stores with glass in front. They get off of their motorcycles when a familiar face emerges from an alleyway.

RED DYNAMO
Here we are, a city with no police, no alarms, no defense whatsoever! The night is ours, gentlemen!

Red Dynamo picks up one of his swords and chucks it through the window of one of the shops and the bikers run in through the broken window. Macky waits on the street.

INT. TWILIGHT CITY, SHOPPING DISTRICT, SPORTING GOODS STORE - NIGHT

The three bikers scatter through the store, collecting every possible weapon. Bats, Guns, Bows, you name it. One of them is standing at the ammunition when he is pulled into the shadows and emerges with a large slice through his neck. He drops dead. The figure that pulled him in isn't visible. In another part of the store, a second biker is carrying a large amount of baseball bats when he is snatched into the shadows and drops dead from having the back of his head smashed in with one of the bats. The last biker is walking toward the front of the store, in the light of the motorcycle. He walks toward freedom when he's tackled to the ground. We finally get to see who has been doing this, a handsome, dark-skinned man in black leather pants with a black t-shirt and black trenchcoat. A pair of black goggles cover his eyes. His neck and wrists are badly scarred. He has two .45 holsters underneath his forearms. He is holding a bow and arrow, this is RENEGADE.

RENEGADE
You know turning the lights out was a bad idea, right?

BIKER
Let me go!

RENEGADE
Alright. Fair enough.

Renegade stands up, allowing the biker to think he's free. As he's about to get up Renegade STOMPS on his RIBS, smashing them. He pulls back the arrow at point-blank range in front of the biker's face and let's go. The arrow stands straight up and the biker stops moving. The Red Dynamo has seen all of this. Renegade begins to walk toward him. Red Dynamo brings down a bolt of lightning to strike Renegade, but he vanishes into the shadows before being struck. Unsure of a strategy, Red Dynamo turns himself into pure electrical energy and goes into a street light. It shines brightly. Renegade pulls out one of his .45s and shoots the light. The electrical energy runs across the ground toward another light when it vanishes. Several feet to the left Wayne Lucas is holding Red Dynamo up by the shoulders. Wayne notices Renegade emerging from the shadows as if her were part of them.

RENEGADE
That was impressive. Now take him out.

BLUR
Take him out?

RENEGADE
Prevent him from doing this again. Kill him. You'll be doing the city a favor.

BLUR
I can't kill him. I'm going to turn him in to the authorities.

RENEGADE
He killed all of them.

BLUR
Two wrongs don't make a right.

RENEGADE
But justice makes for a better world.

BLUR
That isn't justice.

Red Dynamo manages to slip loose, only to be grabbed by Blur again. Blur then speeds off holding him. He's taking him back to Blake City to jail him there. He makes it to-

INT. BLAKE CITY INSANE ASYLUM - NIGHT

Blur knocks Red Dynamo out and turns him in. They welcome the Dynamo as if he was a regular there. He is placed in a rubber padded room where everyone is kept safe from him. And he's kept safe from Renegade.

EXT. BLAKE CITY INSANDE ASYLUM - NIGHT

Blur exits the asylum and speeds off. Renegade emerges from shadows and looks the building up and down. He turns and walks away from the asylum.

FADE OUT.
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Excellent start.
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Quite intriguing!:cool:
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Old 05-02-2009, 04:59 AM
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Man, that is a badass opening.

Can't wait to see what Momus is up to...
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Thoroughly enjoying it so far. I can see this being very fun to keep up with.
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Excellent introduction. I hope you don't have too much trouble with Dier. After reading the rest of the characters, he's kind of a Vertigo boy floating about in a Marvel universe.
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Old 05-03-2009, 05:43 AM
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Awesome stuff so far, MM. I am glad you actually decided to write this. Can't wait to see what you do with the Gore The Red character.
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Excellent introduction. I hope you don't have too much trouble with Dier. After reading the rest of the characters, he's kind of a Vertigo boy floating about in a Marvel universe.
Deadman's been used with great efficacy in the DCU, though.
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Thank you, everyone. The next piece will be posted later tonight or tomorrow afternoon. It will introduce Eric Westward aka Volpone!
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