here is some more of my loving..........

[scaryminda15]

i love school
i like playing pool
boys drool
girls rule
i rock
why do men smell like a smelly sock


ok what do u think?

[Posher778]

your rhyme scheme is horrible.


Do i sound like simon cowell?

[lionels_mother]

*shudders*

[h0rr0rdiva]

Those are great, the long 1's can be good at times when you need to express a certain feeling, and the short 1's are good when you need to just write.

I would put a poem I wrote, but I hate being judged.:(

[Posher778]

Originally posted by trippin_the_rif
Come on HD. Ignore the insignificant goof balls who ridicule. Some of us are actually pretty nice.:)

liar.

[h0rr0rdiva]

Ok here is a small piece of 1 I did a few years ago.

...as I gaze upon the beauty of his face,
my heart skips,
My trembling knees knock as we embrace,
my lips drawn together.
Our bodies formed one in the moonlight....

Thats all I'm Going to do sorry.

[Marroe]

Originally posted by stubbornforgey
heres a song i wrote

I saw shining star in his eyes
i felt a warming glow in his arms
but when we kissed..
i knew...I'd miss
The freind , I turned to for love..

The words he spoke had me in a trance
his warming touch took me to paradise
when we were through
i knew ..i'd lose..
the freind i turned to for love

I never meant for this to begin
em sorry now i let my heart win
the price i'd pay to turn back a day
and have him as a freind once again

I feel so out of place
out in the cold...
if only he were here for me to hold..
I'd let him know
I need him so ..
take me..how we were before
god .. now hes gone for sure ..
He's my freind...i lost for love ..
lost for loveeeeeeeeeeee ..ohhh no ...
lost for loveeeeee..

'pant pant...bow'

I like that. Makes so much sense to me.

[scaryminda15]

dante what did u think of the poem?

[Dante'sInferno]

It was good.:)

[Angra]

Originally posted by Posher778
your rhyme scheme is horrible.


Do i sound like simon cowell?

No. You sound like Eminem, yo.