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To be honest, I think the story is interesting, but could easily fall apart. Also if you are writing the script in Swedish then you probably will have less issues with grammar and spelling, but if you do write in English then I recommend trying to provide it to either a fresh English student (all the rules and spelling is still fresh in their mind) or a professional writer/editor. It also maybe a good chance that you can outline it and give it to someone who can write more easily in whatever language you want.