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Originally Posted by noctuary
Just thought you might like to know that the correct figure of speech would be "just desserts", I believe.
I'm not just nitpicking about that one thing, I did read the entire story. On the whole, I thought it was quite clever. The subject matter is near and dear to my heart as well. I always enjoy reading stories or watching films where this type of scumbag gets what's coming to them.
One critique: I thought that the description of Gramps at the beginning was a bit overblown. It would have made for a cleaner paragraph to simply say that he was dressed all in black. Otherwise, I thought it was quite a fine job. I'll be reading the rest of your stories as well, when I have more time. Good work.
Oh, and I think that "Absolution" works better for the title.
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Thank you :)
I think you are right on the "Just Desserts" thing. I will fix that :)
how's this:
He wore a black outfit, with a wide-brimmed hat.