You complied with my request, so I kept my word. Read a few pages. Not bad. You have a tendency toward passive voice and somewhat stilted prose, but it was clearly written and no misspellings or poor punctuation, so points for that. It was a bit of a slow opening and didn't really pull me in.
Good luck with your marketing efforts.
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