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The story has a very good concept and is written well in most places. It kept my interest through out, but there was a bit of confusion with your second post. A revision of the ending I assume?
I would re-write the story using the same style as the revision. It would make more dramatic. Of course, it sounds good the way it is minus some grammar fixing.
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