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all right, I've read it a couple of times and really like it. It conjures a great mood and tells a sharp, quick story.
but something's bugging me.
I should like it more. the elements are great and the narritive is well paced, but I think the story needs a more specific narrator. the guide, the curious traveler, someone searching for his remains?
the story sounds like folklore and I think it would benefit with being told as folklore. Just my thoughts, it's definitely good if it's got my wheels spinning like this...
good job Vod
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Francis Bacon
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